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When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) grenouille 2007-11-10
If this goes how I expect, this could be your best work yet. I like how you have a common them in all your longer stories, yet they are all still unique. I look forward to the rest of the story.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) Jimm 2007-11-10
Interesting way to deal with the Dursleys.
I know you've used it before, but I can't think of another author who's used a society of (relatively) peaceful Horcrux users. It's an intriguing idea.
Thanks for sharing this with us.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) Teresa 2007-11-11
An excellent chapter! With the training that Jason and his associates are providing Harry will be in a much better position to deal with Dumbledore, Fudge and Umbridge. Of course, they'll try to control our neutralize him if possible but that could lead to several unpleasant consequences.....for them. I hope that Jason finds out the truth behind Sirus's imprisonment. Hmmmmm....if Malfoy tries to use that diary now perhaps Harry can make the proof stick. I've always felt that Dumbledore should have been to get Malfoy on that one despite his in with Fudge. It seemed as though Dumbledore didn't even want to try an call him to account for the matter. It was also good seeing the Dursley's get what they deservered.....I just wish Hedwig had survived. Thanks for the latest chapter!
When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) jabarber69 2007-11-11
WoW interesting revelations about the horcruxes and things. I'm definitely looking forward to all the training all over the world...if it gets that far, the story I mean! also the sentencing of vernon and petunia was unique as was the execution...what would stop other wizards of using that spell on muggles? Also I at first had a raging moment that passed just as quickly...the moment was who gave the wizards the right to do that to muggles, especially muggles that didnt want anything to do with wizards. But then I thought you know the dursleys could of just dropped Harry off at a orphanage the morning they found him or just simple called the police and tell them the truth they found him with a letter and no they didnt want there nephew thank you kindly... As for Hedwig she and dobby are my favorite nonhuman characters, sad that she didnt surive and how come Harry isnt even asking about her!?!When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) Jearom 2007-11-11
The Dr. is back!
Of all your stories, the White Warlock is my favorite. I was pleased to see you fleshing out the Immortals that helped Harry & Co in WW.
Excellent punishment for the Dursleys. I never understood those stories where Harry was forced to buy them off for his emancipation or in which the Dursleys kept evidence of the Magical World and used it as blackmail to get out of trouble.
Can't wait for more!When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) DrT 2007-11-11
Jabarber69: for some reason your review is showing up everwhere except where I can respond to it! So, Hedwig. . . At the moment, Harry doesn't know about her (probably thinks she's off safe someplace, canon!Harry at this point didn't pay a lot of attention to those things not under his nose). He won't be shown grieving, although her loss will hurt him a bit; mostly taken from his near non-reaction in DH.
The conceit here is that all the 'facts' of canon up to the summer of Harry's summer before second year remain. There are 5 other Horcruxes besides Harry (Nagini was made one in canon when Voldemort was in his mini-Voldie form, as stupid as that seems to me), Dumbledore is as he was in canon, with all the guilt and manipulations, etc. etc.
The Brotherhood had largely removed themselves from most European affairs for centuries, and while concerned with Voldemort, did not rouse themselves in 'canon time'. Contact with Harry makes many of them interested in the world again. Powers which have not been flexed in a millenium are going to become active, old allies (vampires, and readers of my stories can guess the other) will be encouraged to participate.
Little Harry, malnourished physically and intellectually (can you imagine what the Dursleys would have done to him if he outscored Dudley in school?) will spend a year with millenium-old wizards who find they enjoy working with Harry, who find they LIKE Harry, and he will absorb their ideas, their training, and some of their attitudes.
Harry is never going to be an intellectual, a poet, a scholar. He will be a practical genius. He had flashes of that through isolated parts of book V. That totally disappeared in books vi and vii.
To use a LOTR comparison, canon!Harry was part Frodo and part Sam, led by a figure who was one half Gandalf, one third Saruman, and a little bit Gollum. This Harry is part Frodo, part Aragorn, and a little bit of Merry and Pippen toward the middle of the third book.
My, where did all that come from???
"T"When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2007-11-11
Brilliant work with this chapter. I agree with grenouille that this might well turn out to be your best work to date. As always, your premise is unique, and your follow-through has been methodical and brilliant so far.
Looking forward to chapter 3.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) BJH 2007-11-11
Quite an interesting fform of execution, painless yet torturous at the same time. I wonder if you will spend any time on Vernon's attempts to remain awake, assuming of course that he believes any of that twaddle.
What I really like in this story so far is the insight into Remus's personality. He is a pack animal, that explains why he followed Dumbledore so strongly that he ignored Harry, he took DD as his Alpha and in most packs a new Alpha kills the young born to the old Alpha to start his own line.
Really nicely done.
BJH
P.S. I hope you are feeling better.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) Cateagle 2007-11-11
That was quite the interesting chapter and it leaves lots of interesting possibilities. I found the history of these Old Ones rather fascinating and I look forward to seeing the training they give Harry. Certainly the information they're imparting to him is going to disconcert Dumbles, at the very least. It should be interesting if he manages a heart-to-heart discussion with Dobby.
The treatment of the Dursleys was nicely done and their sentences, fair. I rather liked the final touch of the curse applied to Vernon.
'Tis a very, very enjoyable chapter. Oh, and I agree with upir comment above, I can't see Harry as an intellectual, he's too much the "man of action". On the other hand, if a considerable, informed, and trained intelligence is brought to bear on actions, the results can be world-shaping. I daresay some are going to regret their treatment of Harry.
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