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When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) solunvar 2007-11-11
Aside from the slightly disturbing part where a vampire calls another "master", I am enjoying this fic. I don't know whatever it'll be healthy for my own writing if I follow this one completely though; I always become envious & insecure when reading your works. If there was a king of fan fiction, I'm sure it'd be you.
Nice appearance of Crouch & Shacklebolt by the way, it's nice to know they're alive and kicking.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) MadMax666 2007-11-11
To to jail, go directly to jail, do not pass Go, do not collect $200...oh, and if you ever get out of Muggle jail...we'll bury you in one of ours. Thank you, have a nice day!
Couldn't have happened to a nicer pair. And Dudley will be shipped off to live with Aunt Marge. Even better, he gets sent to St. Brutus Secure Center for Incurably Criminal Little Brats.
Can't wait for the next installment.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) sweetgirl 2007-11-11
This was good. Vernon's punishment was prefect. I could see him trying to stay awake so he won't die. I wonder how long will he last. Wonder what will happen to their fat pig of a son? I sgree with you about Harry not neing an interlectual. Harry was always think on your feet man of action type person. I do think he is smarter than what canon protrayed of him. He could not have survived all the things he did without some brains. Looking forward to the next chapter.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) PerfesserN 2007-11-12
The Doctor is in the house. You’ve done an excellent job of world-building, as always; likeable, sympathetic characters in the ancient ones and a satisfying karmic justice for the Dursleys.
At some point will Harry be saying “Hey Moe!”?
Now if we can just find the other Horowitz brother and Mister Feinberg. . .
Continuing the LOTR references, I see a Galadriel-like quality in the “Old Ones,” I wouldn’t be a bit surprised to see each of them giving Harry a parting gift, to help him in his quest.
A ring perhaps?
Nah, it’s been done.
(Gollum, Gollum. . .)
I guess Dudders, being underage and all, will find himself fostered somewhere. Wouldn't it be a nice bit of irony if he were to be cared for by a magical family? (Insert evil laugh here)
Write on, write on!
N!Author's response
Of course Harry gets a ring, a Deathy Hallow, in fact! Dudley gets stuck at Marge's, so I didn't bother mentioning that. Petunia will deliberately cause trouble any time she comes up for parole, and will therefore stay in prison just over 15 years.
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(#) selenepotter 2007-11-12
Great Chapter!
I feel that Vernon is getting off too lightly!
What will happen to Dudley?
More please!
Author's response
He's with Marge and out of the storyWhen Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) Dragen 2007-11-12
Another great chapter, I like what is going to happen to Vernon.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) Toto 2007-11-13
Good, though i beleive your hp magic is stronger than shown in the books :p
I quite liked whatever happened so far, and i am hoping we see more of hermione quite soon.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) strangergirl86 2007-11-13
Interesting story. I am glad that I found it and cannot wait for the next installment. Thank you.When Vernon Didn't Miss
(#) Vanir 2007-11-14
"Have a pleasant afternoon" indeed.
Reading this, i feel a bit ashamed of the scribblings i produce. Ah well, practice makes perfect, and you've been done practicing for a while.
Looking forward to next installment. In your own time, of course.
VanirAuthor's response
Let's see, I wrote mediocre poetry for 25+ years, and have written non-fiction for 20+, and fanfics nearly as long. Yep, lots of practice. Hope I can get far enough ahead on this to write some non-fiction over winter break. I'm far enough ahead to post a chapter this weekend.
As for Crouch, I usually don't hear the actor's voice from the movies while I write, but I could really hear the actor who did Crouch saying some of those lines.
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(#) LabRat 2007-11-14
Dang, wizarding law is ruthless. Like where this is going, can't wait for more.
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