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Domination
(#) brujah_childe 2008-02-25
This has the potential to be a very interesting story, provided that you don't let the smut overshadow the plot. Too many times great stories get turned into 100k words of PWP. Don't get me wrong, I REALLY like smut, but there's a story here too.
As far as new girls for Harry, I think that Pansy is highly under-represented in the 'girls Harry bangs' catagory. You do mention Pansy and Millicent being raped, but not them being killed. So, assuming they're still alive, they could be possible additions to Harry's stable.
Pansy I could see as a 'high end' sub, almost a switch, being able to top the other subs under direction, but not on her own initiative. That is of course if Harry can get her to overcome the abuse she recieved at the hands of the DE.
Millicent I can't really see as Harry's body type, but I could see her as some form of muscle. Particularly for Pansy as they have a lot of shared history to draw on.
Another possible addition could be Romilda Vane, if for no other reason than she hasn't been done to death in fanfics. She already has an interest in Harry, (or did in years past in canon,) and as Harry has had little actual interaction with her, she could spring something really kinky on him without being ooc.Author's response
def not Bulstrode - have an ugly mental image of her. Pansy was a possibility, I havent completely decided which girls are in yet. Vane I havent even thought about. No idea what her personality is like.Domination
(#) maraxus 2008-02-25
this is starting out to be a great story. i do have one question in the first chapter i thought you said that tonks was the last black becouse her parents died early in the war, but then the meet them in chapter 2, was this just a simple mistake or did i misread?
once again love the story thus far.Author's response
mistake on my part, ignore that in the first chapter. sorry!Domination
(#) CrimsonRogue 2008-02-25
I still vote for Daphne over just about anyone else from Harry's year, except perhaps Tracey.
Think about it, the named females in Harry's year are (and I may be missing a couple): Hermione Granger, Lavender Brown, Parvati Patil, Padma Patil, Mandy Brocklehurst, Susan Bones, Hannah Abbot, Pansy Parkinson, Millicent Bulstrode, Daphne Greengrass and Tracey Davis. We get in-canon pictures of every single one of those girls except for Daphne and Tracey. It's like Rowling threw them in but then promptly forgot about them. Greengrass, especially, is such a sideline character. Davis is mentioned during the sorting in SS, but Greengrass is not. So, I automatically am slightly more approving of any story where the author has a decent understanding of the English language, syntax and includes Daphne Greengrass as a character (preferably a core character in the story).
Also, while Pansy may have once been a potential switch, after being gang-raped by her family, she probably would not be that confident or domineering now, unless she got some serious counseling and closure.
So I don't see Pansy as a switch, but I would be much appreciative if you would include Daphne.Author's response
Daphne is almost a definite lock to be in later. I loves using her for a HarrySlytherin connection.Domination
(#) koppe 2008-02-25
Great so far, can't wait to see how it's pans out.
I'm looking forward to Ginny.
As for Hermione, I very much hope she too ends-up bonded -- but perhaps first after resisting (and condamning Harry's taking slaves) for a long time. The reaction of Hermione's parents should also be fun...
I guess since so many wizards fell there are quite a lot of single witches... I certainly would love the Patils and perhaps the Quidditch-trio joining -- and maybe Luna would come back now. I'd also love for Gabrielle -- and perhaps Fleur (if she's single) -- to join... every good wizarding harem ought to have a Veela or two...
Maybe -- because he's so strong -- he'd even end-up attracting a widdowed Narcissa or other older single women?
Keep up the great work, and please update soon (and please include Hermione too)
Domination
(#) sagesolon 2008-02-25
Here are my suggestions:
Daphne: She is from a pureblood family and could bring about more seats on the Wizengamot. She is supposed to be cold and distant, but that could just be a facade waiting to be melted.
Gabrielle: she has always been subservient to Harry, I think she would make a good understudy for Tonks.
Susan Bones: She is loyal. Remember in the movies she was the only one at the Hufflepuff table in the library who stood up for Harry when Justin, or whoever that was, began saying that Harry was the Heir of Slytherin.
Pansy: maybe. If she was broken by the loss of Draco she could be a decent add in. Kind of a case for him to save.Domination
(#) GreyShadow 2008-02-25
Oooohhhhh Dumbledor got told off like ah Bitch!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Domination
(#) canath 2008-02-25
This Fic looks to be very good.
I think that the Patils whould be a good addition to Harry's slaves because no offence to anyone but with there culture and the way the wizarding world is i whouldnt be suprised if they were subs.
For Gabrielle you whold have to get around the fact that Vella are probably doms seeing as they are sexual creatures to begin with.
And of course alwasy a fan of Greengrass and Davis beeing with Harry.
Keep up the good work, cant wait for a new chapter.Domination
(#) canath 2008-02-25
So far this is a great fic.
For girls for Harry's Slaves I whould think that the Patils whould make a good addition as there culture and the way the wizarding world views some women whould put them in the sub role.
Gabrielle and Flure whould be slightly dificulte as you whould have to get around the fact that Veela are probably doms seeing as they are purely sexual creatures to begin with. Mabey have them be doms unless they meet a master which turns them into subs.
And of coures Greengrass and Davis are always fun in any kind of paring with Harry because not much is known about them and you could do anything with them.Domination
(#) cj_cold 2008-02-25
Nice chapter.
Like that you decided to hold off on introducing Ginny and instead consolidate his relationship with Tonks.
The confrontation with Dumbles was interesting and shows that Dumbles lost a lot of influence after the war.
Thought the Tonks' were deceased so it was a suprise for them to show up at Gringotts.
Think it would be interesting for them to come to dinner once a week. To visit Nymphadora and also start to give Harry the extended family he has always wanted.
Loved the crown, very artistic.
The signing papers to make Tonks his porperty officially, what does that entail exactly. From the first chapter I can guess that her vaults were transferred to Harry's name and are sub branches of the Potter vaults now if she still has any access without Harry's permission.
While I like the idea of dressing his girls up with style I don't know if dresses would be functional for Tonks given how much time she spends on her knees beside Harry.
Missed a nice opportunity with the dress shop for Harry to recieve a fashion show.
While on the matter of appearance I noticed a common mistake of writing Tonks. That is when authors say Harry prefers her in real form and then they go out into public did she change her appearance to something else in public or did she still have her white hair and pink eyes.
Can't wait to see what kind of sub Ginny is and also how Hermione reacts.
More soon please.Author's response
The tonks thing I messed up with: Forgot that her parents were dead, ignore that in the first chapter.
The signing of the papers makes it official in the eyes of the ministry, just to prevent future problems
And Harry said that Tonks should be whatever she is comfortable in: not that he particularly enjoys one form. He just said pink is sexy because she was insecure about her eyes.
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