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• One Man Army

  (#) animekingmike 2008-04-26

  loved it, what do you mean by female force? please post it in next chapter.

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  (#) LordBlack79 2008-04-26

  Loved the chapter!! Please post again soon? Also are you going to have Harry create his own lightsaber soon?

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  (#) DaemonSadow 2008-04-26

  Loved it, but you need to start with the harem building soon, though that's just me. Ah, the wonders of Battle Meditation!

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  (#) dennisud 2008-04-26

  If your going for Xena and Hercules Reference, why not name ACC-007 Xena, Gabriel or some other famles on the show!
  
  As for the Female Force, why not a Pansy parkinson/lavender Brown type, which pretty much drives most sane men MAD!
  
  dennisud

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  (#) Vanir 2008-04-26

  Quoting LordBlack79, of course, and pushing on. A Broadside? Cool, and strategically sound as well. Lets see, a starship needs no aerodynamics, so there's no need to have the smallest cross-section from the front so why not have the main batteries on the sides? Clever. Project a large front and manouver to a smaller profile, opening massive fire and losing enemy target locks. It's a good visual, that. In the movies, the ships manouver from side to side, only occasionally diving or climbing but it's still space. Most weapon turrets also move sideways but are limited in up/down movements. If Harry moves more in the vertical than the horizontal, a traditional opponent wouldn't adjust in time. Wrath of Khan, anyone? 3D?
  If Harry uses a couple of other Gods of War to name ships, he'd confuse the hell out of his clones. Fun, heh? Mars, Tyr, Wotan, there's a lot of them. Keep at it. I'm right here waiting.
  
  Vanir

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  (#) Wonderbee31 2008-04-26

  Very good part here, and looks like the females flock to Harry no matter what, and if the Force has female attributes, I wager Harry will be feeling it sooner rather than later, LOL.

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  (#) hptrump 2008-04-26

  Is Harry going to get the opportunity to go back to earth to kill Voldemort? If Harry is getting a harem maybe a few of the girls from school and from SW will make up this harem.

  Author's response

  wow, that is the most asked questions in this story, lol. He will but it will quite some time before he will get back. After all he have bigger fishes to fry in SW first.

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  (#) Grozt 2008-04-26

  I live this Chapter, and i sure hope that you are going to update soon.
  And that Female Force, why not just for the fun of it make them look like someone from Dynasty Warriors

  Author's response

  heh heh, you should wait for a little bit, I'm planning on making a Hp/Dynasty Warrior xover. Now that would be interesting.

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  (#) cj_cold 2008-04-26

  Nice chapter.
  
  I would have expected the Pirate forces to run or at least reconsider when confronted by warships. As you noted they have no experience with battling real warships because that is too dangerous and non profitable for a pirate. MOst likely the pirates were promised this would be easy pickings, they should have cut and run sooner unless teh villain had threatened them.
  
  Like the new fleet. Thought it was a little Deus Ex Machina to have the clone reinforcements arrive unexpectedly. They were keeping another twelve ships secret from Harry who is the commander. Maybe they were being held in reserve.
  
  Also as exciting as it can be to unveil new equipment at the last minute as commander Harry should have some input in teh selection of what equipment his units are issued.
  
  Don't think the female force idea is good for this story. It would be amusing in a more comic or crack fic story but from all indications this is supposed to be a serious story.
  
  Has Harry learned of any connection between the Force and Magic. Did learning about the Force help his magic, what did the holocron Master think of Harry's magic.
  
  Thanks for the clone guide, the really confusing ones are the clone captains though, so many CC-### interacting is confusing.
  
  More soon please.

  Author's response

  Well here some things to help answer your comments. True, Pirates are cowards in face of a professional force. But remember that the Pirates outnumber Harry's fleet so they got overconfident. They assumed that their numbers were more than a match for the heavily-armed warships. Also, Harry's army is constantly growing thus need constant shipments of weapons and war machines to be bought. In the begining of the chap, it was said that there was a 'small' fleet of pirates approaching Kamino. So Harry just brought a small detachment of ships with him. That's why reinforcements was sent to help him. Trust me, those ships in combat right now are just a small fraction of Harry's Naval Force. Harry discovered that Magic and the Force is one in the same. Just different names and was used differently by Jedis/Siths and Wizards.

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  (#) Cateagle 2008-04-26

  Hmm, definitely an interesting space battle so far and I'll be interested in seeing how this one develops now that all the players are there. It'll be interesting to see if what Harry's already mastered of Battle Meditation can affect this battle. The set up for the battle itself looks decent and you give a good thumbnail view of the battle (unless you can write space battles like David Weber, it's probably better that way). It'll be interesting to see if any of the tactics developed in 3D throughout Earth's history (submarines and aircraft) that Harry may know about will have application here. I do agree with Vanir about naming the ships after goods of war (Marduk, any one?).
  
  Aa for a female aspect of the Force, perhaps it (she?) should come off as a mix 'tween Hermione and Ginny, but knowledge and emotion mixed together but focused rather than dissapated lavendar Brown or Pansy Parkinson appear to be.

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