(#) BloodyTalons 2008-08-04Enjoyed the story. I would suggest, that to remain credible, all marked death eaters that are students would be rounded up after such an attack and taken by the ministry. Since you had aurors interviewing witnesses, the fact that Draco, at least, was planning to aid the attack would've come out. Only incompetents wouldn't search the rest of the students for dark marks. And since you have a few aurors going with the train, they'll have plenty of time to check each student on the way to Hogsmeade.
As for Harry's whining, Susan and Luna should be able to get him out of that by the time they arrive in Hogsmeade. Although, I imagine that the damage to that village will be bad as well and compound the problem.
Hope you get to writing the sequel soon as it does appear to be 3-4 months overdue.
(#) FreakyRufus 2009-09-07I quite enjoyed this story, but I was a little surprised at the "ending". Since the story was marked as complete (and since it is your most recent story on this site), I had expected an actual ending, rather than a note saying the next part would be "coming soon".
That issue aside, I think you did very well with the charaterisations of the main canon characters. I enjoyed the dressing-down Susan gave Hermione, too, and the way you portrayed her.
I was also amused by the bit in this chapter with Harry and the cottage for the two centaurs, and jumped to the same conclusion an earlier reviewer did. It is decidedly ironic for Harry to accidentally solve his own problem he had accidentally gotten himself into with Laurel, and not realize that he had solved it, much less had had the problem in the first place.
- entertaining story with a more rebelious Harry thanks to the eye opener Luna.
In the mean time instead of separating himself completely he tries to keep his relationships with others and open their eyes. While dumbledore is clearly presented as sinking toward dementia.
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