- Ah, someone needs to take Harry aside and explain one of the basic rules of war to him, "No plan survives first contact with the enemy, that's why they are called "the enemy".". He really needs to get some books on the better generals of history, though I'm not sure how much he'd find on ones like Bellisarius.
I rather suspect that what Harry did was essentially marry Firenze and Laurel but that it'll take him a bit to realize that (heh, he's new to this Family Head/Herd Stallion business). Mind you, I still want to see a scene on the train where both Luna and Susan use "My Stallion" in talking about Harry, bonus points if Ginny's within earshot at the time; double bonus points for Ron & Draco (I'm not sure how many for Hermione, esp. since she's still a good friend).
The title of the next book/story sounds interesting as there are so many who'll be discontented:
Harry - for all the games Dumbles tries to play
Dumbles - for Harry striking out on his own and doing quite well, esp. when the contracts Harry arranged as Lord Potter and Lord Black come to light
Tom - His attacks likely didn't succeed neaer as well as he'd expected (we know about the platform and I suspect the others went 'bout as well for the Deeters).
I am sorry to see that Seamus died, but I'm glad no one closer to Harry died. The assistance of Neville and House Longbottom to the Patils should go a long way toward helping cement things 'tween Neville and Padma. And, finally, I do like how matters are going 'tween Hermione and Terry (heh, he's got to be better for her than Ron!).
- That chapter had a little bit of everything and I loved it. and now the whole thing with hermione and susan was strange and it was obvious that susan was jealous and fearful of hermiones relationship with harry that she thought that if hermione expressed her intrest in harry that he would leave her to malfoy and marry hermione. hermione may have talked with terrybut that was more likely academic than anything else.since hermione is definately intrested in harry. and as for the fight harry should talk to a retired auror,the bloody baron or binns about what war is like.
(#) GryffindorDragon 2008-04-29Nice chapter, tho' a bit depressing. Death is part of war, but I wonder why they just let the attacks happen. Are there really so many death eaters and so few Aurors and Order members that the Deaters had the upper hand? Why not have something like wards that isolate apparation (doesn't the ministry have that? or why is there apparation points?) so the death eaters are trapped? Oh well, Harry can't have it too easy, can he?
- Fantastic story from start to finish. I love the awakening of Harry to what has been happening around him since he came to the WW that was showcased by Laurel. Cannot wait for more from the series. Would like to see more of a political savvy Harry dealing with the Ministry and Minister.
- Well done!
So, Laurel and Firenze? I wasn't necessarily expecting that, but it works, and gets the somewhat squickier possibilities for Laurel out of the way.
The ending was interesting; I'm not sure I was expecting to see the fight dealt with in so few words, but it did the job--the aftermath was more important to the story. It's a pity about Séamus, but it would've been unrealistic if nobody'd been killed but nameless spear-carriers or extra-peripheral characters like Mr. Patil.
(#) rdgale2000 2008-05-01Great chapter! I'm sorry I didn't read it earlier.
It sounds like Harry is just about to sink into a depression. Thinking only of the bad things that happened, and not all of the good he has caused over the summer.
I'm glad for Luna and Susan being matched up with Harry. They don't seem to get enough press in the stories in my opinion. It will be interesting to see how thing progress.
It looks like Firenze and Laurel maybe able to get together after all and start a family of their own.
Again, a great job on the chapter.
I look forward to the next one.
- In the chapter pick list this chapter is labelled as chapter #12, even though it's #13. And the 'next' hyperlink from this chapter points to itself.
Now, I'm a H/Hr man first and foremost, but I thought this:
> but she still glared whenever the enthusiastic elf served lunch or drinks. Harry could imagine a lifetime of that sort of thing souring a marriage.
... was clever. Normally I assume that Harry will fall in line with Hermione - since my girl is always right :-) - but, if Hermione was so intractable as to accept magical fact, that the elves must be bound - and I can see that you're painting her as such, a bit less flexible than what I would have hoped, first with Susan's accusation of being 'jealous' and then her attitude to Dobby - then that's a clever observation by you/Harry. I've been enjoying Harry's little thoughts of maturity as this story has progressed.
(Wondering, too, if Hermione is jealous, and if so, if it's because of her own amorous feelings re Harry, or just losing her place as his best friend/girl)
> Luna would go to bed with a smile, wondering how she had lived so alone for years.
That was very nice, too; I think many of us have a soft spot for Luna, and wanted canon!Harry to 'defend' her at Hogwarts (which he didn't do). But this is even better, attacking the problem at the roots ... help her make friends and the Ravenclaw harassment will hopefully go away ... or she'll have many people defending/helping her. (Wouldn't mind seeing that once they're back at Hogwarts).
No mention in the DA training of Harry teaching them how to survive AK curses from the DEs? I often wonder how a real magical fight in Rowling's universe could last more than a few seconds, given the DEs' readiness to use the unblockable killing curse.
Realistic outcome of the fight, with various innocents killed.
> "Despite what you might believe, he was questioned under Veritaserum and admitted to passing on information to his cousin, who is marked.
Nice. Although Harry assumed that Stan was NOT a DE in HBP, and his face was 'blank' when he appeared as an attacker above Privet Drive, one of Greyback's men mentions that Stan has "'put a bit of work [their] way". I guess you're assuming that the latter was NOT under the Imperius?
I've always hated your use of the hypenated word "floo-ed". It seems strange; I think you must be the only author I've ever read who uses it. I think others must use "floo'ed" or "floo'd" maybe.
- Somehow I failed to get the final alert about this chapter. Hence why I'm reviewing so late.
I'm quite surprised that Harry is even going back to Hogwarts instead of looking into alternatives. He knows that Dumbledore does not have his best intrests at heart. Why would he willingly place himself in a position where Dumbledore would have not only free access to him, but a position of authority over him? I know the saying "Keep your friend's close and your enemies closer", but willingly and openly going into your enemies stronghold where his power is at its height does not strike me as smart. Especially since Dumbledore has not been willing to contact him on neutral ground. While at Hogwarts, he is vulnerable to being summoned to Dumble's office and force-fed veritiserum and then obliviated. Possibly being obliviated of more than just that incident.
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