- wowee =]
This was really good =]
I loved how you started a few lines with the same word and then a short sentence, it made a powerful effect =]
Well done =]
Author's responsethankyouthankyouthankyou. for r&r, and simply being nice.
i originally didnt know what i was writing, so i just used what came into my head randomly, and the repition seemed to work.
so ty. glad you like.
(#) ThreeCheersForMCR_x 2008-05-04Omigawsh that was AMAZING!
I totally fitted with the lyrics of the song. It really made sense! Clever.
i tried to get it to make sense as much as possible, so i hope it worked. iunno. depends on whos reading.
thanks for the r&r. and for generally being nice. makes me happy to see people do actually review occasionally... ive had a total of three reviews for this chapter, even though theres been over 80 views in two days.
sorry to rant here, but REVIEW PEOPLE! tell me what you think is good, what you think is not completely working and tell me how i could change what i do to make it better. i like the lj reviewers more. 'cause they actually review.
haha come on, you know im right. stop being lazy and TALK TO ME.
(#) ThnksbutiloveBobmore 2008-05-05Ok...
That was good but i don't get it.
If you see what i mean.
P.S Just so i don't get people going OMG your soo rude and shit, yeah i know her. Im alowed to be mean. :D
Oh Sa-Rah, Sa-Rah you make my heart burn
Author's response...... no?
maybe its the excessive raping you do, but something slows you down there deary.
okay, now for the explaining.
the implied meaning of this story is, Hayley is in a mental institution, and has been for two months, but she was not meant to be there. then she meets Ryan, who she becomes friends with. they fall in love, yadda yadda, and both decide they want out, as being in there is driving them insane. slowly, they stockpile various pills, and crush them into a powder, replacing the sugar or salt or something commonly used in the kitchens with the medication. it is used in the food, which causes many inmates to have reactions or accidental overdoses to/of the medication, which leave 20 in hospital, and a further 82 dead. in the chaos they escape.
its essentially a 'why i did it' thing from Hayley.
like ive said before, shoet version of that is: Hayley and Ryan are in a mental institution, and they commit mass murder to escape in the name of love. so yeah. make sense now?
oh and p.s. you are not allowed to mean. wheres your respect woman? even though the actual question wasnt at all rude, because i asked anyone who was confused to speak up. but anyway...
please stop singing or youll make the cats go deaf
haha. im so gonna get raped for this tomorrow. =/
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