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Harry Potter and the New Powers
(#) Pointer 2008-05-14
"the last week was like a month for Harry,"
You stated a 60 to 1 ratio, (even if reversed). One week-seven days would be like 420 days to Harry. Probably need to adjust your time ratio.
The bit with Hermione was somewhat jarring. I doubt she'd break it off with him over getting wounded. Especially since it was her screw up. In any case she'd do it to his face, not in a note signed "Granger". I would investigate.
You're in my alerts.
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(#) TxA_GunFighter 2008-05-21
Good chapter. Either Tracey or Flur.
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(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-05-25
Good chapter. Fun fact for you. Its Doc Marten with an e. I wouldn't have known either until I searched for them on ebay a couple of years ago. Good chapter, and I believe that would be the intro music for Fleur Delacour.
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(#) GryffindorDragon 2008-05-28
You have a sixty to one ratio on the time sequence (one minute is one hour), so the one week outside should be 60 weeks inside (though you have it backward in the story - one minute inside = one hour outside; but I'll overlook that because I know what you meant).
Would 20 mins. a day for only a month build that kind of muscle? Must have been the potions. But than the Purebloods would have those too, wouldn't they?
The witch is Fleur, right?Harry Potter and the New Powers
(#) den31 2009-08-09
I just had to tell you that when you used the kill two birds with one stone you made merlin say camelto instead of Camelot.
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(#) IronGray 2013-07-14
In the NEW POWERS you have the start of a great story. My only criticism is that your chapters are only a glimpse into the story. They need to be longer and more fleshed out. This is the mark of a great writer to be able to expand your stories to give the reader a clearer picture of what you have envisioned. As to the flamers, ignore them. Certain people need to tear others down in order to think they are better then they are. If the criticism is not constructive then ignore them and tell them all to go pack sand. Keep up the good work and your vision clear.
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(#) rlDawson 2017-03-22
I'm enjoying the story and I realize this published quite a while ago, but come on man. Did you do any math for your time dial action at all? Or try to think it through? You got it backwards and the numbers are all wrong.
Overall I like where the story is going though the chapters are way too short.
-Richard
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