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Elementary Calculations
(#) am12 2008-05-17
You said 'tell me what you think'
I think that once he has calmed down, the HP that you have crafted in this story is far too determined, far too intelligent, to just accept this state of affairs.
He would set about investigating all his legal options, at minimum. Not to mention that he tried once to blackmail his aunt, and so slightly more shady options might also be something he would try.
in canon we've heard nothing of solitors/lawyers, but there is much we did not hear about wizarding society. I would be interested to see some solicitors investigating Harry's claims of forgery.
Not to mention, he even has potential allies in the Dursley's. Imagine if he asked them to HELP him stay out of the magic world?! shocking
keep up the fun story.
(I know, we do want him at Hogwarts, but just based on what you've crafted so far, I can't help seeing that outcome.)Author's response
No the Harry I've created won't take this laying down. I'm already working on his reactions after he calmed down.Elementary Calculations
(#) slickrcbd 2008-05-17
If I were Harry, I'd realize that I wouldn't be bound by the restrictions on undeage magic. Since Dumbledore forced him to attend, he doesn't have to worry about being expelled. I'd also consider doing something like showing up, but during the Sorting walking up and telling everybody what happened. Then going up to Dumbledore and punching him in the nose. Then saying, "Now that I've publicly attacked a staff member, I won't ask for leniancy. I must be expelled. I guess I'll be going back to Xaiver Instutue. Goodbye magical world.Elementary Calculations
(#) rijlkent 2008-05-17
I just read the whole story up to this point. (Unlike Cobra, I kept reading because I enjoyed it!) It's not the first 'Harry learns about his magic early' fic I've read, but it's very well done.
I'm not too shocked that Harry decided to pass on Hogwarts. I didn't like how quickly he capitulated to DD. It makes sense, but it could use a bit more explanation. In my mind the explanation is that Harry knows (now, if he didn't know before) that DD can fuck with people's minds, so he's not likely to have much traction in the 'regular' world. And by now, he knows about the wizarding government, such as it is, and there's no way he can win there against DD.
You have already shown Harry capable of successful blackmail. I think you'll need a reason for Harry not to be a total asshole at Hogwarts (a la several other reviews). That is, if you don't want him to be a total asshole.
One could be that he knows he's stuck there, and has enjoyed having friends at Xavier. The point system has a way of subverting peer pressure. Another could be a carrot from DD--"I can, of course, make it very easy for you to go back into the Muggle education system at an appropriate level when you are done with your wizarding education." Of course he means when he's done with Harry....
Anyhow. Very well done. Good fun. Looking forward to the next.
Peace-
-RijlAuthor's response
You're actually right about why he capitulated so quickly and no he won't be a total ass in Hogwarts, and yes he will have a very good reason for it.Elementary Calculations
(#) ficbob 2008-05-17
Good start
Definitely a more prepared and seasoned Harry for his first year
Going to be interestingElementary Calculations
(#) thetaxzombie 2008-05-17
Slytherin and god help dumbledore because Harry's going to want his blood. Dumb sob is number one on Harry's hit parade me thinks.
Seeing as he's powerful enough to scare Fawkes I would say that Bumbledore is in for a bumpy ride.
Can't see him as a dark lord as he's not interested in taking over the wizarding world but with his wandless abilities that no one yet knows of, it should be most interesting.Elementary Calculations
(#) Immortal7 2008-05-18
With harry now being forced to enter the wizarding world I feel the Albus will wish that he had not interfered. I see Albus trying to get the Weasley's to bring Harry closer to the light side and failing. It will be interesting to see just how the presence of such a hate filled yet obviously intellegent Harry shape the lives of other first year students. I see Hermione becoming more distrustful of the staff if Harry brings proof or the wrong doings. They also a might form a more sympathic closeness based off of his prior muggle acomplishments or distance depending on how you write her character. Padma may also play a huge factor.
With your Harry though I can't see him placed in Slythern since for a house that is for the cunning it let if Crabbe and Goyle. And a major Draco character rewrite would be in order. With virturely uncrafted characters like Daphne and Tracy it might be interesting, but I'm rambling about a future that has yet to be. Great story so far and I hope with Albus's current betrayel McGonagall even if he isn't a lion helps help Harry crush the old headmaster. LaterElementary Calculations
(#) SamStone 2008-05-18
Very nice. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to see how this snowballs out of control. Dumbles is totally going to wish Riddle was the only problem. On an aside what thoughts will muggle born or raised have on Harry since he made it into such a prestigious school? See an interaction with Ravenclaws being different.Elementary Calculations
(#) SmacksKiller 2008-05-18
Very nice story. Well written and original. If I was in Harry's place I'd try to get enrolled in one of the other magic schools that McGonagall talked about.Elementary Calculations
(#) Albeios 2008-05-18
Watch yourself Dumbles, you've made your most promising ally a double-edged blade! No doubt Harry will see Dumbledore as a real enemy. Not Voldy, he'll see Voldy as a pathetic Lich excuse of a Dark Lord. Thats how I see it anyway. Keep up the excellent work!
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