- I do love these sorts of stories where Harry & Hermione go back to change things whether the older or younger versions its still fun to see things go differently and mostly in their favor.
Can't wait to see how their bond changes the canon plotlines!
P.S. More of your other stories too!
- Heh, heh, heh; I suspect both the Dursleys and Dumbles are in for a few surprises in the near future. It's good that Harry's been able to straighten things out with Hermione's parents and get them backign him; that's going to make things rahter more difficult for anyone wanting to take him away from them. I thought it rather interesting that Hermione's spirit had managed to return with his; that's going to make life interesting as their bodies mature. I do hope you continue this story as it's getting most interesting and enjoyable.
- I think if I was Harry I'd want to continue the home schooling option. Not having Snape would be a powerful incentive. Having someone besides the ghost for history would probably be enlightening as well. Should you decide to continue the story, I would recomend that you don't bother to recount any thing that is the same as canon. A brief reference could be used if it is necessary to establish the relationship between events. I would love to read more but I understand that if the writing of it is not satisfying to you we are not likely to be reading it. Thanks for writing. W.
(#) GinnyMyLove 2008-11-26More More more, I know you said its probably over, but I can only hope that is a Slytherin plot to get more reviews begging you for MORE!
There are a lot of time-travel fics out there, but yours is original enough to stand out. Please consider at least an epilogue.
Even better would be 2-3 chapter summaries of the Hogwarts years leading up to Voldemorts defeat. Especially if they find a way to get him at the end of the Philisophers Stone's Gauntlet. Maybe if they can trap that last part of his soul in another Horcrux, he would live forever, but as inanimate objects...
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- This was certainly not a final piece of the story. The story is a bit uneven, ranging from true brilliance to sketchy between, and sometimes within scenes. My overall grading is Excellent, though. It may be an almost classic outset, but your division between the Harrys is a lot of fun and brings originality. You have also used the Bonding plot-device with great skill and accuracy. Now, keep it up. It may be one of the greatest clichés in Ficverse, but i love a good legal Dursley bashing. May Mayhem pursue!
(#) stealacandy 2008-11-28Phew, the old "Harry goes back in time and immediately bond wih Ginny Weasley on the deepest levels of ther souls" doesn't improve any by it being Hermione instead.
And the martial arts, yes, I can see that happpening. In fact, I Have seen that happening. I've seen it and seen it, over and over, in dozens of fanfics, and mostly I have yet to see it work. (With a possible sole exception, still have to see how that one'd turn out.) I'm growing weary of seeing it again.
But that's just me. Whatever knocks yuor boat, I say.
But then there's the story itself - it goes from descriptive (to a level) to sketchy, like you detailed an outline for the story, filled in a few bits, and then rushed off to post it without filling in the rest. Then again, I understand this is more a sketch than as tory, so probably it doesn't matter. But while offering a sketch, you should have gone into more details of what makes it unique, to differentiate it from the hunderds of other stories (and sketches mistakingly calling themselves stries) that use the exact same plot line (or sketch, if you prefer).
Author's responseThus why I stopped where I did. As I said in my Introduction "...It’s a variation on Harry goes back. Nothing too original..."
The reason I posted it was to find out what other people thought. Your thoughts mirrored mine. That is one reason I didn't continue it. I couldn't find a way to make it more interesting.
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