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Harry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) thekev 2009-07-13
Great chapter, I can't wait to see Dumbles crying because his plans are all but a puddle of piss now. Even if you don't send them to Hogwarts, like most stories in 4th year you still have to have his name come out of the goblet. keep up the good work.Harry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) dennisud 2009-07-13
Nice continuance. I do though want more from the kids themselves and how they perceive their parents trying not only to protect them, but get them ready for the upcoming fight.
I suggest adding Ameila and Susan Bones to the mix as per Amelia's position and possible influence.
BTW would Harry need two wives for both Houses?
If so Susan can pair up with Neville and you could add Hannah Abbott for his 2nd wife.
dennisud
P.S. Oh and the Patils could work too!Harry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) zicou 2009-07-14
That's AWESOME !!!
I think you have made a mistake, first you use the acronym P.B.L.&G and next you are using BPL&G, is that a mistake or a second company ?
Continuuuuuuuue, it's great!
Z.Harry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) VampireMan 2009-07-14
story is great so far. Keep up the good work.Harry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) red802 2009-07-14
I like the layout of the story because it is one that has not bee done before. Im a little confused on the dates in the third chapter. The passages all have the dates from the year 1996-97 which would make Harry around fifteen or so. Might want to change it to 86-87Harry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) blair2818 2009-07-14
so far I like it but I am a little worried it will turn into a story were harry is super well trained and unstoppableHarry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) timm1131 2009-07-14
This is wicked. Please update soon, I like where you are going.Harry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) Nautilus 2009-07-14
nice work.. the story seems to be flowing really well... there are a few places that require touch-ups but on the whole a job really well done... looking forward to the companies that are being formed and the unique ideas from both grangers in contracts to the wizards... i can just see sirius having a secret plan to form harry's harem.... hehehe... i know this is mostly Harry/hermione, but i wouldn't mind Fleur and Nymmy add to the mix... but that is for the future.
looking forward to a few dialouge between the kiddies as well.Harry Potter and Fawkes' Furture
(#) scruffy1 2009-07-15
It's possible I missed it but Shouldn't Hermione check her family history. Given Dan's grandmother was a implied to be a squib there is a possibility she could inherit from his family.
Other than that plot point nice work. The explanation of the tower could have been clearer or perhaps I could have been smarter not sure which.
Scruffy1
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