(#) AlaskanKing 2010-04-24Very good. I am really enjoying this story. My one little concern is that Harry is telling a lot of people about him dying and coming back. I would think that it would be more of a secret.
Looking forward to more.
Author's responseHarry is only telling the who need to know, in order to do the jobs he needs them to do. The order members, needed to have a valid reason to trust him, instead of Dumbledore. the Rings would only go so far. You'll notice that each of them is fond of him.
Andromeda, Amelia, Augusta and Carolyn needed to know because he's putting them on the front line, and he disagrees with Dumbledore's policy of 'zero information until it can do no good'. They'll be facing Dumbledore in the council, and blocking his manipulations, and it's only right that they should know why they're risking their lives and livelihoods.
I think he'll be telling the story once or twice more, the last time to a larger audience. That audience will be his Jedi.
- I hope that your sister's health has improved. Please let her know that I wish her all the best. I'd also like to thank you for posting this excellent chapter. Hmmm.....no doubt the Slytherins would have had at least two reations to Harry's meetings with Andromeda and company - 1, envy of the prospective plans, and 2, fear that the hatchet job was aimed in their direction. Truly, if Dumbles, Voldy, and their respective minions knew what they were about to face and had good sense they'd dissappear! I also enjoyed seeing the R&D crew developing working lightsabers! I hope that Tonks and Remus learn too......and somehow I have this image of McGonagall wielding one and speaking Gaelic as she fought. Chuckle...... it looks like Dobby and Winky have settled down very well. I enjoyed the scene with Harry and Hermione, and Harry's visit to the bank. Somehow though I think that very few wizards are going to go for single combat just to avoid bank lines...... snicker. Thanks again! :)
Author's responseHello Teresa. Her condition has indeed improved. As of this afternoon, she's awake, and aware, and trying to bully the ICU nurses. (BWAHAHAHA!)
Actually, several Slytherins will be directly involved. Now the Nibblers, on the other hand, should race for the Ross ice-shelf!
As i see it, the biggest problems Harry will face, will be Dumbledore and Voldemort. Hangers-on will be accorded the status of 'incidental casualties'.
Truly, if Dumbles, Voldy, and their respective minions knew what they were about to face and had good sense they'd dissappear!
Fortunately for the story, neither has that level of awareness, otherwise it would be rather a dull story.
R&D: I agree. Deus ex Machina only goes so far. While Harry has the information to build the power-cell, he needs someone else with more control and experience to make them for him. The same applies to both his creating his focusing crystal and learning to actually use the damn thing.
Remus and Tonks will get to play, but though it's a great idea, McGonagall has a more important role. More on that later.
I figure since they are mated and Dobby is still a few bricks shy of a load, Winky's gonna be 'helping him along'. Remind you of anybody?
H&Hr. They're kids having fun.
The bank. How better to tell the wizards that they are held in utter contempt by the goblins, and get away with it?
And I agree with you. There would be damn few.
See you next week. Same Bat-time, same Bat-channel.
(#) jabarber69 2010-04-24that was definitely worth the wait! nice one on the talks between the tonks, what a great kisser mum and dua is! the longbottoms and of course caroyln chapman....and the next chapters are looking to be rather good too.
Author's responseHeya Jabarber.
Thanks. Well, I think Andi was pretty happy. Snicker! I have some more set-ups and then the story will proceed along.
Carolyn Chapman was my Attorney before she retired. After my wife died, the state of Califpornya tried to take custody of my little, simply because I was a male and in the reserve at the time.
She made them think twice, and once again. It took 18 months, before they finally decided it would be useless to try any more. that dint' end the harasser though, and so she went after them once again. Her technique was strictly legal but like a bulldog she never let go. For that I honor her.
Chapter seven will have some action, but due to the nature of the chapter will be rather short. Sorry.
- I suspect life is going to get rather more "interesting" for Albus Dumbledore than he'd prefer, let alone suspect until it descends on him. I loved the whole chapter, especially the portions with Harry dealing with the Longbottoms and with his other political responsibilities; I suspect that's going to unsettle a lot of folk when it comes out. The scene with Harry & Hermione was good fun and it rather sounds like Harry most thoroughly convinced her. Now that he's got one lightsaber he can demonstrate, it should be most interesting to see how many more he can make for his "forces". I'm looking forward to when Albus finds out that "his sword" is a dummy prop and not the real one; it'll just add to his frustration and embarassment. Finally, I loved the thought image of McGonagall swearing in Gaelic as she swings her lightsaber (can you imagine the reaction of Albus when it comes out that some of his teachers have them but he doesn't?).
Author's responseHeya Cat!
Ooh, yeah! Albie is so used to getting things his way he's unable to comprehend anything else. Since Harry is not under his control any more, Harry has obviously gone dark.
I wanted the reader to understand there are serious issues in the Wizengamot and while Harry is not qualified to handle them, he has done the logical thing and found people who are. With the ladies working for Harry, Dumbley is gonna find his life a lot more difficult!
Then scene between Harry and Hermione(and Dobby/Winky) was a palate cleanser. Just teenagers having some fun.
I'll explain the lightsabers in chapter 8.
McGonagall, swearing in Gaelic and swinging a lightsaber is a truly frightening thought! Her family's Claymore is bad enough!
While McGonagall knows something of the lightsabers, she will not be carrying one herself. I'm going to have her doing something else. It's not as exciting but just as important.
Albus will get his first taste, however brief, of Harry's lightsaber in the next chapter.
His first 'conscious' taste, will be in chapter 8 or 9.
- First, best wishes to your sister. I know she's a much greater import than writing, so thanks for taking the time for us readers too. :)
Next: Another great chapter! I share AlaskanKing's perplexity regarding Harry's willingness to share his after-death experience. Not that I think it's that great a secret, but why bring it up at all and risk his friends incredulity? The details of Dumble's mechanizations to date seem to be quite sufficient to convince Harry's allies to his cause.
Also - wondering what (if anything) the Tonks ladies' impulsive behavior is leading up to. I don't see anything with Andi, as she's married, but in the beginning, there was mention of multiple wives...
Last but not least - I like the way you've integrated the SW mythos into the story. Very well done. I just hope Harry's friends aren't going to become as skilled as Harry is now until after V's death. After all, they don't have the advantage of a mental download from a 900-year-old master to help them. (And it would smell dankly of authors-plot-device.) :)
Ps. Will this be posted elsewhere? I'm not a fan of ficwad's engine, though the stories here are just as good as elsewhere.
Author's responseFirst, I thank you for your kind thoughts. She is doing better. I have a few more chapters stored and ready to post and so the next few, bar anything life-threatening, should be posted on schedule.
As I explained in my reply to AlaskanKing's review, I'm giving them the information they need to do their jobs. More...he's letting them know exactly how far the old man will go to have things his way. Remember in chapter one, where Dumbledore was completely unconcerned over Harry's death? I needed to let the participants know that Albus also considered them expendable. Harry is offering them a chance to think...and act, for themselves...something Dumbledore wouldn't.
Most of the people he'll be dealing with will already know Harry, or at least know of him, and that will make it easier for them to accept his explanations.
The Tonks': Nymmy has always been rather 'bubbly', and the 'thank you' she gave him was not unlike the greeting she gave him in the 'nexus outside time' in chapter 2. She's still close enough to his age to see him as attractive.
Since I've placed this after OotP, She's already set her sights on Moony, but there's nothing to say she won't let her emotions take control from time to time. Andi has not only been welcomed back into her family, but has a new status rarely accorded a woman in the wizarding world, and has the ability to directly influence that world. It's understandable that she'd react in such a way.
You'll notice that all the people I've chosen to represent Harry are strong woman. There's a reason for that. With such strength demands respect, especially in a male dominated society. That, combined with the ability to control 14-16 Percent of the Wizengamot directly and as Amelia said in chapter four: ...due to family alliances, vassalage and oaths of loyalty or succor...I would have to say with those three rings, you could easily control sixty to seventy percent of the Wizengamot. Harry&Co. can have the entire council tied up for as long as they want to, push through laws or repeal other laws. While Amelia will not be voting her seat as minister, she will be closely involved in how the votes are used.
In this case, the story will be Harmony with a possible addition at the last. I haven't decided that yet. Andi is married and I feel the bond of marriage is absolutely sacred, so there it is.
Instant super-Jedi: No they will not. And Harry will not. He has the knowledge but not the experience. He...and they, will have to work damn hard to achieve the level he needs them to be to face Voldy &Co.
I'll explain that in chapter 8 or 9.
I'm thinking of posting my stories on FF.n. I've avoided them until now because they had some rather draconic policies in place.
(#) rdgale2000 2010-04-24I really didn't expect to see another chapter out so soon. Needless to say it is a welcome surprise.
Another great chapter! You keep the story moving quickly, not giving anyone a chance to get bored.
Here's hoping your sister continues to improve.
Thank you for your efforts in writing this fine story.
Author's responseI have several chapters already set up for posting. I'm keeping them on a once-a-week schedule so I can do last-minute editing and prepare the later ones. This should be between 10-15 chapters all together.
I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and haven't become bored by the minutiae. It is, unfortunately, necessary.
FireLemming is doing much better. The doctors tell me she has a better than even chance of walking out of the hospital. Even if she does need home care, I can provide that.
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