- G'day mate. Nice to see Harry look after Arabella. Good to see Dudley get through OK. I think Dobby has been taking lessons from the twins. Loved what he did to Dumbles & Snape. Would like to have seen Rudolph Nagini. Enjoyable Xmas. Hopefully Sev & Dumbles get a bit more pain soon. Good read. Cheers.
Author's responseHeya Zamia!
Yeah, I actually had to write that at the last minute. I realized during the final edit that Dumbledore doesn't tolerate loose ends.
Dobby: Even in canon he was an independent thinker. The twins mighta helped out there, but I think he got most of the ideas from Harry.
Dumbles/Snape: I'm not really certain which hurt them the most...
Rudolph Nagini: When I was laughing myself silly, I was humming that song while writing that part. -Snicker!-
More pain for both is coming. Voldemort is also due for some more headaches.
- Way to go Dudley. I have never discounted boxing as a martial art. WWF wrestling moves? Yes, but not boxing. Cassus Clay could eaily kill people with his skill in boxing in his youth(Oh? Sorry. Mahamud Ali is Cassus' other name) I do hope that Dudle is the one to take down Snape or atr least give Snape a few punches to the groin. I wonder if Dudley will talk to Mack about a training regime to help him lose more weight and get into better shape.
Oh, well. Fudge is no more. I wonde how long it will be before the stuff he ranted about before his fall is exposed and cuases even more headaches for the pureblood agends and Dumbledore.
I thought Snape was out of the castle along with Trelwaney(or hiding in the castle) or is there something I missed? I know he is no longer a teacher, but...
As to Dumbledore, I really hope that the person who despises him the most can finally deal with him: Aberforth. Albus' brother. I do wonder about that entire goat thing and if it wasn't created by Albus to discredit Aberforth. Be funny if Aberforth manages to get the head of family away and kicks Albus out of the Dumbledore family.
Fun chapter, although I don't think Nagini deserved what happened to her. She's just an innocent who is caught up in the middle of madmen.
Looks like Ron is slowly comming around. I was wondering if he wouldn't have had the lesson of patience and humility that Rosh Penin recieved from Alora and her two lightsabers
Author's responseHey again, Disruptor.
Yeah, Cassius Clay was, in my humble opinion, the last real boxer. the man was just incredible! (I do know his story, and I do think he was screwed over badly, because of the unfair and bigoted practices of the US government. He earned that gold medal by showing he was one of the best in the world, he earned his title as heavyweight champion by years of hard work, and they took it because of his religious beliefs and his opposition to the war in Vietnam.)
OK, I'm off my soapbox.
Dudley will not be a regular visitor to the training facility. Carolyn brought him because she thought it would be good for Harry to see him and good for him to see what Harry had accomplished.
Still, he'd doing well on his own. He's got people around him that will support him in his training, and who knows, maybe he really can become heavyweight champion.
Fudge: I actually regretted having Snape kill him. It really wasn't necessary for the story, other than to get Voldemort some gold, but it did show Snape's personality when eh allowed his inner sadist to come out and play.
Snape is no longer a teacher, but Dumbledore arranged for him to stay in the castle on the unused side. He has a potions lab there too.
Dumbledore(s): There's not enough information about Aberforth in canon for me to base a personality on. All that is known is that he despised Albie for Ariana's death, (and no, we will not be going into that here.) and he was convicted for performing inappropriate charms on a goat.
Those 'inappropriate charms' could have been teaching his goats to speak...or dance...or write poetry.
He will get to watch as Albus is 'hoist 'pon his own petard', and when I've done what I intend to Albus, Abe will be head of the house Dumbledore.
Nagini: Now that I look at it, you're right. Dobby does have a wicked sense of humour. I'm sorry. Still, Voldy would never harm her, so she got off easy.
Well, Luna doesn't have -two- lightsabers...yet, and her 'inducement' programme has two parts. He will learn. after all, with such inducement, how could he not?
(#) Wonderbee31 2010-10-20Great part here, and really enjoyed seeing Harry helping out Arabella there, even as Albus in all his idiotness was willing to let her die for the greater good. Got to say, Snape has gone past the point of redemption here, and will look forward to his final punishment, that he is oh so deserving of. Was gladdened to see Dudley able to defend himself and his maybe soon to be girlfriend there, and can't wait to see what happens next as the other professors continue to pull and push Dumbledore's buttons.
Author's responseHeya Wonderbee!
Thanks. I couldn't leave her to Albie's mercies. He's losing his grip and any decision he made could easily be affected. A loose end like her could be dangerous to him. In that case, it would be easiest to just 'clip' that end.
IMO, Snape started out beyond redemption. His final punishment will be humiliating, and permanent. And he will not die.
Dudley: he's not perfect but he's realized he's done wrong and truly want's to make up for it. That Marissa is sweet on him is a bonus.
Hie being able and willing to defend himself, came as a nasty shock to the Deez. Five of them at least.
The button pushing will be subtle. he still has control of their jobs. By now, most of the administration of the school goes through Minerva anyway, and so, he's fast becoming redundant.
he's also a most powerful wizard...for now.
- Before I get to the commentary, a few typos, mostly dropped letters, grabbed my eye. "...she understood tat sometimes..." should be "...she understood that sometimes..."; "He interrupted hr musings." obviously should be "He interrupted her musings.";
Author's responseHeya Cat.
I counted the errors. A dozen misteaks in twelve thousand words is a pretty good ratio, meesa thinkin'.
- Dagnabit, hit the submit button by accident, but that covered the typos that jumped out at me.
I quite enjoyed the whole chapter, from Harry rescuing Arabella (care to bet she tells him everything she knows and gives further testimony as to Albus' mendacious and manipulative ways?), especially while leaving Dumbles totally out of position and control. The scene at the dance was interesting and I suspect Dudley has just risen considerably in the regard of Harry, Carolyn, and a few others who count. I'm quite certain that Severus Snape is nursing a bad attitude toward him, now, also. I'm certain he'll try for him again and I hope he has equally embarrassing or worse results (be amusing if he tried to get the Dursleys at home and ran into those wards; 'twould be such an ironic fate). The giving of Christmas presents to Albus, Severus, VOldemort, and Draco was a nice touch and their 'enjoyment' of their presents was everything one could want (wonder if they'll ever realize just how much damage Harry's elven troops can inflict on them?). The Christmas at Potter Castle was a delight and I'm glad Harry was able to show people so much (those two young kids are clearly going to be watched and, hopefully, recruited down the line) and so much enjoyment; I daresay he & Hermione may well be seeing more of Dudley & Marissa in the future, especially if the latter couple become serious about each other (and wouldn't -that- frost Petunia).
I really can't weep for Fudge, he made his choices and has to abide by the consequences, all of them. I quite suspect Auror Diaz is going to find himself getting a lot more "training time" in the near future. Rita needs to be careful, Harry could consider that an unfriendly act (I doubt he will, but you really don't want to bite the hand protecting you).
As for those Death Eaters who've decided they really want out, that they're not getting at all what they signed up for, they've earned what they're getting and I'm sure they'll e an inspiration to others to be a damn sight more careful in their plotting (old proverb from one of Mack Reynolds' stories, "When three meet to plan revolution, two are fools and one is a police spy").
In conclusion, it looks like Albus, Severus, Tom, and the Malfoys have all suffered "interesting" set-backs and I'm certain there will be more to come. I do like that Harry's not doing it all on his own by a long-shot and has plenty of back-up and support, including in the political arena where he doesn't have experience. It'll be interesting to see how Luna's 'unique methods' work in getting Ron into proper shape and form; I would've thought she'd have needed a beater bat to proper get his attention first.
Author's responseHeya again, Cat.
Not a problem. happens alla time.
I couldn't leave her there to be 'eliminated' and while Harry pretty much knows what Dumbledore has done, she could have a few heart to hearts with Carolyn. In fact, I have the ending written and I can easily fit that in, between now and then.
Leaving Dumbley out of position and control means keeping him off balance. Perfect!
Having heard what transpired, Harry definitely sees Dudley in a different light. They have years of antagonism to work out, but with this on top of all that Dudley has done to make restitution, he sees his cousin becoming a better man.
While it would be fun to have Snape test the wards at #4, I have something much better planed for him than mere death.
Receiving presents is always nice. -Snicker!-
He can't help it if they don't like what he gave. It's the thought that counts after all.
Elves: That's actually a major point in my stories. None of the wizards consider the house-elves a threat. Bad Juju, Mon! Look how easily Dobby did all the things he did, while bonded to the Malfoy's, even though he knew he'd have to punish himself for doing them.
More than merely showing his gusts, he is reassuring them of their childrens' safely and demonstrating the benefits of their training.
And Harry will definitely have a few words with those kids' parents. they'll be mentioned in the next few chapters, and later, when the war is over, he'll take them as his first -real- students.
Harry and Hermione will 'Occasionally' see Dudley and Marissa, but it will be infrequent. As long as Marissa doesn't let on she's a witch, Petunia should have no complaint.
While I really didn't like killing off Fudge, you are correct. When one sleeps with dogs, one wakes with fleas.
Diaz made a rookie's mistake. Hopefully he'll learn.
Rita: This really doesn't violate her agreement with Harry. While unexpected, it also helps to keep Dumbledore off balance. Voldemort knows the truth, but he's willing to keep quiet on it.
TE disaffected: Basically yeah. murder, rape and torture are requirements for their mark, so I really can't bleed for them. Like most minions, they are learning they are not only expendable, but expendable at their boss' whim.
Mack Reynolds: Sounds like a Russian proverb to me!
Yes and each of them will suffer more. Voldemort may win some of his battles, but each time he'll lose people.
Dumbledore is more than happy to watch the Deez kill off the sheep. In canon he did little or nothing but gather information and let his people die. Some leader,hunh?
Harry: I set this up like I'd plan a campaign, leaving little to chance and relying on my people so do the things I couldn't. Too many authors have Harry being A 'lone wolf'. It's not realistic. A lone wolf cannot hope to accomplish such goals unless he has a hideous amount of luck. That's what Rowling's ghost writer did in Book seven.
(One of my unfinished stories, 'Taking matters into my own hands' is a direct contradiction of this statement, so when you read that, please feel free to tell me I said that.)
Luna doesn't need a beater's bat. She's got a functioning lightsaber!
Until next time...
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