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• JEDI POTTER

  (#) slickrcbd 2010-10-20

  I noticed a detail that I found interesting, but am unsure if it was intentional. You had several family tapestries destroyed in this chapter, is it supposed to be symbolic of something? The owners of both trees survived, so it wasn't the end of their lines...yet. Obviously the heir of the Gaunts is marked for death, and hopefully the heir of the Prince family is also going to bite the dust by the end as well.
  
  I am just not sure what symbolism you are trying to portray.

  Author's response

  Basically yes. Since Tom and Severus are both the end of their respective lines, the tree is dead. Tommy will be destroyed, but as I have indicated, Snape will not die. What I have planned for him is far worse. In either case, as he is the end of the Snape line (Unlike in canon, here he is a purebood, with the Snape line being the dominant one.) and has no real prospects, his line is done. The tree is a foreshadowing of that. Since Eileen felt the mugglebornes were equal to the purebloods, it's possible, that other members of her family survived. In either case, it's not that important to the plot.
  
  I may have her make a cameo when Snape is arrested.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-10-21

  I'll agree with slickrcbd, the destruction of those two family tapestries most certainly appears to be a foreshadowing of the destruction of those families by the extinction of their last members. It will be interesting to see how those deaths happen.

  Author's response

  Hey Cat! See my reply to Slickrcbd. Only one death. One 'something worse'!
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Teresa 2010-10-21

  Many greetings! I enjoyed this latest chapter immensely! Hmmmm....you'd think by now that Voldy would have realized he's literally bleeding followers - either they get screwed on missions or he's killing them off personally! At least a few of the DE's have realized what kind of a mess they're in; but why would they be dumb enough to make escape plans in the Master's lair? It looks as though their one working brain cell was overcome by the rest!Chuckle, I had this image of the DE's recrutiment poster - Lord Voldemort wants YOU! Join the Death Eaters, see the world, and conquere it! Meet strange and inferior people, then kill them! (written in very fine print - And whether you suceed or fail at your missions the Dark Lord will punish and/or kill you if the mood strikes him!) Contact a senior member near you for details! I bet the next set of deserters takes off without having a meeting first; and they might decide that the Aurors and/or the jedi are a safer bet. As for the Christmas cheer that Dobby spread around; well everyone knows that Saint Nick needs a little help sometimes, and those books will have a great home with Hermione! I think that Christmas was indeed memorable for Dumbles, Snape, Voldy and the Malfoys! Dudley really came through at the dance, and it's a pity that Harry doesn't know that Snape had a close meeting with a well delivered punch. Dudley would be quite popular with any of Snape's tortured students! It's also nice that Dudley and Marissa are close despite the set up for their meeting. I'm glad that Harry got Mrs. Figg out of there before Dumbles decided to "attend" to her; she might be able to give Amelia additional info on Dumbles' actions towards Harry and his relatives. Harry does have a point, Vernon and Petunia's behavior might have been influnced by Dumbles. At least Dudley was able to work against the conditioning, if indeed Dumbles did use spells on them. It was also nice to see Arthur get the recognition that he deserved with his new job. Will Dumbles think that this is a chance to undermine Amelia since "his" man is in the position? If so, I hope that Arthur and Amelia play him like the idiot he is! As for Amelia's new laws, the one about epithets could cost the Malfoys their fortune in less than a week via Draco's mouth! Dobby and Peeves are a great pair of conspiritors! I loved Dobby's evil laugh, and Peeves' reaction! It was also nice to see Dumbles fail at trying to stop McGonagall from attending the Christmas party! I liked seeing how the students reacted to McGonagall, Flitwick, and especially Moody! As for Fudge, well, when you cut deals with slime you should expect to pay for it. Did Rita decide to slam Harry via Dumbles and Diaz as a bit of petty revenge? If so, she should remember that prison on the continent. Harry can always find another journalist, after all. Kingsley really laid it out to Dias, and his career oppourtunities might plummet at the DMLE from now on. Pity, that. Will Snape ever see his mother in her portrait again, or did she leave years ago when her son became such an idiot? As always, I'll be looking ahead to the next chapter! :)

  Author's response

  Heya Teresa!
  
  Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed.
  
  Voldy, get a clue? We are talking about Voldemort, right?
  
  ~At least a few of the DE's have realized what kind of a mess they're in;~
  
  Ayup!
  
  ~...but why would they be dumb enough to make escape plans in the Master's lair? ~
  
  Death Eaters are not chosen for their ability to think independently.
  
  That recruiting poster idea was hilarious! I'd love to see that in print! A shadowy image of Palpatine...erm Voldemort with the dark mark behind him and dozens of Deez arrayed in front....being tortured.
  
  If there is another group, you mean. Being forced to watched as your friends are tortured to death does kinda tend to dampen any thoughts of revolt. 'Sides, the dark mark can be used to call, punish 'and track'. Karkaroff discovered that in book five.
  
  Still, if any more do decide to leave, well, I understand Antarctica is nice this time of year.
  
  Christmas Cheer: Of course! After all, Dobby is an elf, and the elves help Santa, right????
  
  Isn't it wonderful to know your gifts are well received? If nothing else, they will all remember this Christmas for a long while to come!
  
  Harry won't be showing Hermione those books until after the final showdown. He needs to keep -her- on task!
  
  Yeah, I figured since Dudley was trying so hard, he deserved something nice. His actions were, I think, well in keeping with his (slightly altered)canon personality.
  
  I'm going to keep the 'how' quiet fr the time being, but Dumbledore did use something to 'enhance' the Dursley's natural antipathy for Harry.
  
  Arthur: Ron mentioned that Fudge wouldn't promote him because he lacked 'wizarding pride' (Pureblooded bigotry) Unfortunately Scrimgeour wasn't any better. He finally did get an improved department but, like Snape's information, it came too late to do any good.
  
  Dumbledore will try, but Arthur is already aware of what he's done to the Weasley family, so a bit of 'play' is not out of the question.
  
  The Malfoy's don't have any gold to spare. Remember, the goblins have audited thirteen other accounts. Coincidentally that's the number of inner circle Death Eaters plus a few others.
  
  All they have left is the gold in Malfoy manor, which Lucius has already given to Ol' Snake-breath.
  
  On the other hand, I can easily see the ministry monitors 'dinging' every time Draco says something stupid.
  
  Evil laugh: Dobby knows he has to keep a tight hold on Peeves. What better way than to make him think you're more dangerous than the Bloody Baron?
  
  Dumbledore still has much to learn. Since learning of his machinations, Minerva has protected herself from his less than obvious attempts at control, and it seems to me that Filius and Minerva were the most popular teachers at Hoggy's.
  
  Moody: Is a special case. they all 'know' he's working for Dumbley, so he was a visible threat.
  
  Fudge: I agree. I really didn't want to kill him off, but he would have been a loose end. If he'd survived, he would have fingered Snape and not even Dumbledore could have protected him.
  
  Rita: Not really. She hasn't violated the terms of Harry;'s 'imposed' contract, so she's safe.
  
  Dias made a rookie's mistake. Rita has misquoted many others over the past year sand while she's an obnoxious jerk, she is very good at digging out the exciting. If he learns his lesson, he will go on to become a fine Auror. If not, he can always shine shoes.
  
  Snape will see Eileen one more time.
  
  Thnks for the wonderful review!
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-10-22

  Well, actually, that proverb from one of Mack Reynolds' works was a line from a Russian agent.
  
  From what you've said, I can't wait to see how Snape ends up. It should be a memorable ending.
  
  I rather imagine that between the information that Arabella will be able to give Carolyn and what the "observer" Auror recorded, Dumbledore's position has become that much less secure; couldn't happen to a more deserving person.

  Author's response

  Heya again Cat!
  
  That figures. I haven't read any of Reynolds books, (I think) but I have read many very good books about Soviet espionage, and I recognized the rather fatalistic pattern.
  
  Well, Snivellus will never forget it!
  
  Since she already knows what Harry's home-life was like, Arabella can't give her too much. I just wanted to make sure Dumbledore didn't knock her off. She's a good-hearted person who's been used by an evil old man.
  
  While the Aurors are recording things, for potential prosecution, his reputation is about as low as it can get. You'll get your first glimpse as to what Harry will do in the 'January' chapter.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-10-23

  -chuckle- I do rather like the way Harry and company are already taking down Albus' reputation. A similar "taking down" is occurring over on FFN in Silverfawkes' "Yet Another Universe" where, in what would've been Harry's Fifth year, a desperate Albus, having caused Harry's death in his universe, does a ritual to bring a "hero" from another to stop Riddle; what he gets, from across the worldlines and back in time, is a powerful, smart, and canny Harry, old enough to be a seventh year and just off killing his Voldemort, from closer to the canon worldline, who wants nothing to do with Albus but is working hard to take down both Tom and Albus and having folk willing to help him and keep his secrets.

  Author's response

  I liked that story. Harry is snarky and a general pain in the ass to those who wanted a savior to appear. Unfortunately for them , there is always a price to be paid. Dumbledore is the same callous manipulative bastard he was in canon, and Harry is setting out to demonstrate that clearly.
  
  Here, only Snape is convinced Harry is the cause of his discomfort. Dumbledore is convinced that Voldemort is in some way at fault, and that the government is simply 'misguided'.
  
  Until next time....
  
  Dave

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) aredphxbird2 2010-10-23

  I just started reading this story a few days ago and I was hooked immediatly.All I have to save this is a great story.Keep up the good writing.

  Author's response

  Welcome aboard! Immediately hooked is a wonderful complement. Tell your friends.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) twilliams1797 2010-10-23

  I wouldn't wast good coal on that MoB.. S* in a sock would do it quite well.
  TimW

  Author's response

  Goddamnit Tim! you made me snort coffee! Lucky fr me, I have one of those nifty plastic thingy over my keyboard.
  
  Dave

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) vheritas 2010-10-24

  This continues to be a most excellent, entertaining story. Thanks for all your hard work!

  Author's response

  Thank you, Vheritas. I appreciate it.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Phyrric 2010-10-27

  Great chapter. I have to wonder if you are going for the political power corrupts angle? The way you have the Government taking the assets of wanted men seems like it could back fire for Harry. If Harry all of a sudden became a "Deatheater" his assets would also be taken. This sort of thing has happened many times in the past. Or for example Sirius is still considered a Deatheater under the law, Harry has combined his assets with the Black estate, his enemies are able to pass a bill that says he is a "Deatheater" or or just say he is dark and not eligible for the Black estate(bribes all around and they feel it is best for the government since he is getting to powerful also the revenue the seizure will bring in will be good for the government), what would Harry do if all of a sudden he had no assets and was a fugitive?

  Author's response

  Heya Phyrric.
  
  Actually, I believe any organized government is inherently corrupt. It is the people's duty to keep that corruption from getting completely out of hand.
  
  Thomas Paine once said: "Government, even in its best state, is but a necessary evil; in its worst state, an intolerable one." The wizarding government has grown so corrupt that the culture is actually formed around that corruption.
  
  If Harry were to be accused of being a Death Eater, they'd have to convict him, before they could take his gold. Accused is not enough, especially given that the goblins A) are controlling the gold and B) they like Harry.
  
  In canon, Sirius was able to access his vault to buy the very expensive Firebolt for Harry. Even later on, there was little or no problem (other than those problems devised by Mr Twinkles) in Harry's receiving Sirius' estate, so I have to conclude that a conviction is necessary.
  
  The third point is that right now, Harry and his friends, while they do have enemies, are firmly in control of all three branches of the government. Augusta oversees the Wizengamot, Amelia handles the ministry and Carolyn and Andromeda are there for any legal issues that may come up. More, with Malfoy&Co. on the lam, there's little chance of any kind of suit ever being heard.
  
  Bribes?: Not Amelia. That's why I chose her for that position. Even in canon, she is considered to be incorruptible. That's one of the reasons Dumbledore despises her so much. He can't control her.
  
  Harry, No assets/Fugitive: It's been done. IMO the best story of it's type was excellent, if a bit wordy and Harry ends up making an ass of 'Minister Malfoy' and most of the wizarding world. He also comes up with cures for nearly every disease on earth including cancer and Lycanthropy. And the name and author slips my mind. (Damn! Gettin' old here!)
  
  I may revisit the topic in the future, (after I've posted the nearly 85 unfinished fics I've started.)
  
  Cheers!
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) mirabilos 2011-02-25

  Some fanfictions got ideas, but you really
  try to make the British magical world, and,
  on a meta level, fanfiction better. You not
  just get ideas but apply them consistently,
  bashing JKR and other fanfiction in the
  process. This is, I think, unique, and you
  deserve to be lauded for this.
  

  Author's response

  Hey again mirabilos.
  
  I do try. Having read so many potentially great fanfics, that fell part when when the author forgot the consistency, I decided with mine to ensure the plotline was fluid, yet stable. Everything is done according to a certain flow. Everything has a past, present and future with subplots entering, interacting and leaving when their time is right, in order to make it read better. (Did that make sense?)
  
  JKR: I try not to bash her too hard, as she did give us this wonderful sandbox to play in. it just seems to me that she fell asleep when the last two books were...written.
  
  Your laurels are gratefully accepted.
  
  Alorkin

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