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• JEDI POTTER

  (#) zamia 2011-02-24

  G'day mate. Pity no magic around here, just got a new titanium knee myself recently. Found the funeral quite moving, actually bought a tear to the eye. Dumbles will definitely have to pay severely. Liked the pranks pulled by Peeves. Good to see a bit of damage to Snape & Dumbles. Isn't Harry starting to keep to many secrete, firstly from Nev & now Hermione. Anyhow looking forward to the wedding. Cheers.
  Z

  Author's response

  G'day Zamia!
  
  Lucky bastard! Mine was smashed into seven pieces by Mr. I-Hate-America, but the doctors just casted it and let it heal on it's own.
  
  I hate funerals. I've attended far too many, so I make the ones I write as expressive as I can. That particular funeral was based on one I saw in Africa, and like you said, it brought me to tears.
  
  Dumbley will pay...in the worst possible way.
  
  Peeves: Hey! It was an accident! Yeah! That's right! An accident!
  
  Harry is keeping some secrets. Unfortunately one is due to operational security, and the other is tradition. When I proposed to Pauline, she had no clue what I was up to.
  
  Wedding: The bonding will take place in the castle, with Amelia presiding and 'The Ladies' and the rest of the crew as the witnesses. the formal marriage ceremony will take place after the story is over.
  
  Until next time...
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) zamia 2011-02-24

  Also looking forward to seeing the artwork. Z

  Author's response

  It's coming.

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) twilliams1797 2011-02-24

  I can see DD and Snape going Royal Postal when the simplest things the elves do for them are not done..
  no food, no clean clothes, no tidy rooms, no..anything.. the elves are an integral part of Hogwarts and without them you are in a 9th century castle fending for yourself..
  I can see either of them using imperious or other inappropriate methods to get service.
  "Your detention today is to scrub all my underwear!
  eeewwww!
  
  I do have a question, though, is all the training and naming of the styles and methods SW canon or is this your creation?
  I am not familiar with the SW universe other than the movies, and I read one book twenty years ago, but I don't really remember it.
  
  
  as always, Enjoying this story. I look forward to your updates
  
  TimW
  

  Author's response

  Heya Tim!
  
  Dumbledore will throw a tantrum, as he depends on the elves for nearly everything, but as you saw during Christmas, Snape thinks the elves are spying for Dumbledore, so he keeps them from getting too close.
  
  ~"Your detention today is to scrub all my underwear!
  eeewwww!~
  
  EWWWWWW! indeed!
  
  Your Question: The training and names of the styles is expanded universe, and can be found in Wookiepedia. I used to read Star Wars but haven't had the time since my wife died.
  
  Alan Dean Foster, Timothy Zahn, Michael Stackpole and Keven Anderson, are among those authors I feel to truly excel, but all of them are very very good.
  
  I believe Zahn developed the styles of lightsaber combat, but I'm not certain.
  
  Thans for the nice review.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) phantom0864 2011-03-15

  Hello Alorkin
  
  I just started reading your story from the first chapter and I must say you have reached a nice balance of moving the plot along while showing Harry and company training. All too often a story will bog down showing all the training or will go from nothing to super power with no work on Harry's part.
  
  You have also have been keep things very consitent and well thought out. However I did notice one small and one major problem here.
  
  1st Luna and Remus where there when they buried the house elf but where'nt they making their focusing gem at that time?
  
  2nd Through out the training Harry has insisted on the light sabers being checked and rechecked before sparing.
  However when testing Luna's new LS she pulls out a 2nd LS that was NEVER CHECKED. I would have though Harry would have called a stop to the sparing and then come down hard on Luna for pulling a stunt liked that. After all Luna is one of his top people and should have know better.
  
  If after 30 chapters thoses are the only problems I found all I can say is well done well done indeed.
  
  Looking forward to the rest of the story
  P.

  Author's response

  Hello, phantom.
  
  I'm glad you've taken time to enjoy my writings.
  
  I've seen far too many otherwise great stories that fall apart without a proper foundation...and having served in the mil for as long as I have, I despise instant SUPER-HARRY! (just add magic/potions/time-turner/ritual/etc.) While Harry has the knowledge, he still has to get used to using it, and that takes work.
  
  THE PROBLEMS:
  
  1) You're right! (Blushes) Fortunately, that's an easy problem to correct. When I post on FF.n, I'll remove their names from the list.
  
  2) Again, you're absolutely right...and this is the type of brain-fart I've been trying so hard to avoid. (Gorsh! I feel like JKR!)
  
  While I can rationalize her having previously checked her weapons, the fact is, I did miss it. Harry should have halted the evolution immediately and checked the second lightsaber.
  
  and then chewed her out for bringing it in the first place.
  
  My bad.
  
  I appreciate your input and please feel free to bring any errors like that to my attention.
  
  Alorkin

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