- Finally diving into the 'Return for a 2nd chance at getting things right' storyline.
Well knowing how you write this should be as exiting and entertaining as any of your previous works! Going to hitch on for the whole ride!
Author's responseHeya Dennisud.
Actually, I already did one and have a few more in the works. Time travel and the trouble one can get into while doing it is one of my favorite genres.
Glad to have you aboard. Remember, keep your hands inside the cabin at all times and enjoy the ride.
- An interesting opening. While I generally hope for an intelligent story, delivering some ultraviolence to Dumbles would not be inapropos.
Author's responseHello KenF.
I’m not that civilized. Dumbledore is the direct cause of so much pain and suffering, all in the name of the greater good. I figured he deserved a bop onna beak (or three.)
“I’ll try to keep this as intelligent as possible. The only Deus Ex Machina will be the trip back in time (which I intentionally did not go into as temporal mechanics is not my field) and Fawkes. Pretty much every thing else will be (reasonably) explained.
(#) Destroyerdrt 2013-05-08I hope to see more this was great. Was the time that Harry was living in at the start a mix of Star Trek and Babalon 5? I ask becuse that is what it reminded me of.
Author's responseHey Destroyer.
Actually I was sort of influenced by both shows, although I haven’t seen either in nearly twenty years.
Harry’s world was a logical conclusion of the utopian society with a twist. Unfortunately that logical end is stagnation.
- This looks like it is going to be a very interesting story. I look forward to seeing it continue.
PS: very unique and amusing disclaimer.
Author's responseHeya Celexs.
Thank yeeewww! Next chapter will be up in a few days.
PS. I’ve seen some very funny Disclaimers, and figured it was my turn.
- My condolences on your loss.
An interesting idea, but given the horrors you describe Harry seeing during his lifetime, how does the loss of a mere few thousand people really rate? I could see his anger from a personal standpoint but not the righteous anger on behalf of humanity. Afterall, Dumbledore and Voldemort hardly rate as pimples on the arse compared to the loss of millions.
It is amusing that Harry gets to keep his ship, how will that impact things?
Author's responseHeya BJH!
As much as Marion’s loss saddened us, she had a very Buddhist point of view. Death is part of life and life is part of death. It’s been almost three years and while we miss her still, life goes on.
Taken from your point of view, I’d have to agree with you. Mankind is as mankind has always been; short sighted and greedy. Wars and natural disasters will happen and but for the victims or their families, life will go on. Harry is still Harry. He is a man of deep feeling, and here, he misses Hermione terribly and has for almost a thousand years. That’s really what I was trying to show. He’s tired. He wants to be with his love again and while this way he has to face the darkness again, he has to chance to influence things in a more positive manner. His intent is not to rule, but to help those who do, to make more intelligent choices.
Harry’s anger at Dumbledore is for mushrooming him. If not for the MOB, he would have been better prepared to deal with Voldemort. Perhaps if Dumbledore had actually done his job, instead of leading his pawn around by the nose, Harry would not have been infused with the magicks of several hundred people when Voldy finally shuffled off this mortal coil. He could have died with his beloved, after a normal life span instead of hanging about literally forever.
The My Little will play an important part. Next part will be the set-up.
By the Way, when are you gonna finish ‘Like Some Old Song…’?
- Overall I'm definitely loving this so far, only the end of the chapter left me with some confusion; you said he was going to go back and merge his soul to his younger self, then all of a sudden he's back in time on some island and still has his (destroyed earlier in the chapter) starship. Not quite sure how you made that jump, but I'm definitely eager for the next chapter anyway. I'm also a little confused on whether Hermione was sent back to merge as well, or not.
Author's responseHeya OdinMage.
OK, I can see that. He’s on that island because it is a secret place where he can reconnoiter. It belonged to his distant ancestors and as it’s hidden from the mundanes, he can establish his place before venturing into the wizarding world again.
Writers have created a number of ways to send the protagonist back in time. Most involve a spiritual transfer, some a memory transfer, and in a few the whole body goes back. My idea is a combination of two of them.
As for the My Little, there are two reasons. First, he triggered the self destruct to prevent the Earth forces from recapturing him, after a thousand years of purposeless existence, he was ready to die. He felt death was better than to be returned to his cage, not to mention what they’d have done to My Little, and second, he’s going to need her for some of his skullduggery.
‘Sides, it’s cool to have a starship. Ask Captain Kirk.
Hermione was not sent back. She is a little girl here and will meet Harry in early October of 85. (I took the basis of that idea from ‘All’s Fair in Love and War’ by Shadrac.)
Hopefully the next couple parts will give you an idea of what I intend.
- Overall, It was ok until the afterlife portion.
I hate abused Harry stories where he gets to see everything he ever wants in the afterlife and they go "-but things went wrong and you have to fix it" and the moron simply goes...
There was no arguing. No help provided. The Harry you were slowly building up would have told everyone to go screw themselves, epically since hermione would be there but wouldn't be. Once again he was being used as a "pawn" to fix problems other people created.
That whole part of the story should really be revised to match the personality of Harry while alive.
Author's responseHello, Plums.
Not necessarily. I also despise stories where he just meekly goes back only to turn into the MOB’s patsy again. Here, he has a definite plan, which does not include anything Dumbledore wants. You’ll see that throughout the rest of the story.
He agreed because Merlin presented him a reasonable idea and he has had a thousand years of learning to make sure things don’t get all cocked up this time. He also has Hermione’s tacit approval, and that means a great deal to him.
Hermione is going to be there, but she won’t be the adult he knew. She’ll be a little girl he would like to get to know.
No revamping intended. His attitude is sneaky and underhanded yet entirely within his canon personality (If you squint.) He understands that he was a pawn in his first life, and has no intention of being so again.
I hope you continue to read.
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