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• Across Time, Against Time

  (#) kitkat1327 2006-10-27

  oooo dramatic, and to set things strait I think your grammers great and your knowledge so far of greek myths is superb
  keep it up

  Author's response

  Thank you. =D I've very glad that I've got one more pleased user on my list of reviewers. ^-^ I hope you enjoy the next chapter as much; I'm working on it as I speak. Frankly, I hope you'll like it /more/. ^.~

• Across Time, Against Time

  (#) Demenior 2006-10-27

  Wow, I'm very impressed. This is a very, very origional look at things in this show and I for one like your writing. I know what it feels like to be 'downed' by textbook teachers though, but stick to your style because it's a very precious thing and theyre jealous that they can't get it!
  
  I like your descriptions of the heroes, and the way you brought Chronus/nos and Kronos together to make Cronus and the way his mind had become warped and such. I really, really, really, love different perspectives, especially ones that turn everything you think you know upside-down, and you seem very close to achieving that. Nice work on the narration.
  
  As for constructive critasism: maybe it's just the way you write, or maybe it's just the way I write, but I might have wanted to see some more detail, though, with the way you wrote this first chapter it might be difficult. Anyways, that's about as much as I can say.
  
  Like to hear from you again soon,
  
  ~Demenior

  Author's response

  Impressed? You flatter me. +grin+ Of course, originality is something I pride myself on, being... wel... me. xD I didn't think this chapter would be much to compliment on, as it was more of a filler intro to keep me on track of things.
  
  Yeah, detail is something I tend to put a lot of; I decided that since there wasn't much to this chapter I would waste much on detailing it all too much. I'll keep that in mind though, and see if I can better balance things out for you all in the next chapter.

• Across Time, Against Time

  (#) story_master 2006-10-28

  Amazing! Simply amazing! This is definitely one of my favourite sotires! I really love your writing style. Very different but very awsome. Your story is also incredibly original. I like the way that you introduced each hero. That was really neat. As for constructive crtism? I have only one thing. It's too short! Please make the next chatper longer. But if that's not the way you write then that's okay. Other than that I think that this story is absolutly amazing. Keep up the awsome work and please update soon.:D

  Author's response

  Too short? Be careful what you wish for. xD From where I can see, I've got a lot I plan to 'cram' (gracefully, of course) into the next chapter. I'm extremely proud of being on your 'favorites' list. ^-^ I've been catching glimpses of 'Illusion Island' periodically, and I've found myself cracking up at the smallest things in some of your stories.
  
  'What's wrong with V8 juice?''It tastes like crap!'
  
  I spent a lot of time laughing at that one; I had a conversation with one of my best friends that went almost exactly like the dialogue in 'Unwravelled Prophesy'. ^-^

• Across Time, Against Time

  (#) TwoStripedSocks 2006-10-28

  Wow, Kitty.
  That was awesome!
  ^^;
  Inspires me to stop procrastinating and write the next chapter of Silence The Butterfly.
  I'm still not sure if my stories are okay.
  I'm sure you noticed I changed my writing style a bit...
  It's because my friend pointed out to me that I had way too much description and not enough dialogue.
  She made me start writing play format stories to work on good dialogue...
  And ever since I've kind of toned down the excessive description.
  =3
  The other reason I changed my writing style was 'cause I realized I was getting so involved in description that it was becoming, well, "wolfspeak."
  oO;
  I'd never heard of the term before but I came across it on Neopets and it made me rethink my writing.
  You know... "Fae of silvery pelt pranced daintily o'er the frost bitten terra, charcoal dipped tassel twitching absent mindedly."
  Hehe... I haven't lost my ability to write like that, I've just buried it for now.
  Oi meh. Enough of my rambling. I'm gonna go write now...

  Author's response

  'Awesome'? Neglecting all forms of grammatically correct language: "You ain't seen nothin' yet, sister." xD Yeah, last chapter... eh... not-so-great by my standards. Can't quite compete with you yet, Rye. But I'm getting there. Watch your back, Rye.... >=3 Bwaha.
  
  Yes. Go update Silence the Butterfly. It will make Kitty extremely, unplaceably happy. =D
  
  Rye, darling, your style is brilliant, whether its the buried format of 'wolfspeak' (yeah, I'm still guilty of random relapses xD) or your more dialogued format. You go write that story, 'cause it's like.... of the awesominity. x3

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