(#) Richardc269 2007-01-18This is a pretty good story...even if its about abuse. although, I honestly would have loved to see that fat arsed ugly reject thrown into jail...in any case, abuse never stops. I was abused myself, although not physically...anyway...nice story.
Author's responseIn almost all the reviews for this story, the readers have implied they want the Dursleys and/or Dumbledore to hang for this. I am considering a short second chapter dscribing the impact of Harry's death in both worlds. It might take some time to get it out, as stories like this are exceptionally difficult for me to write, so please bear with me. Alorkin
- Disturbing, but very well written; it sounds like something you might hear about as a good samaritan-like story on the news or in the paper, but much darker. Excellent job.
Author's responseThank you. I used to be a police officer, among several other jobs, so this isn't so far away to me. My sister, who is sometimes my beta, told me that she really liked the way I used Walter both as a bad guy, and also as a good guy. He is a criminal, but he is willing to face prison in order to bring this to light. Alorkin
- I'm glad you wrote this story. Rawlings...and some fanfic authors, treats child abuse with a nonchalance attitude that makes me want to ring necks.
Author's responseI agree 100%. She seems to think that it's OK to abuse children. Her description of the treatment Harry recieved at thee hands of his 'family', is apalling. What's interesting is that Britain has a very proactiive child welfare system. Someone should have done somthing. Alorkin
- Now that I've had time to think about it, the reactions of both the "Light" and "Dark" sides to what happened should make for a fascinating sequel. I wonder if an attempt would be made to fit Neville with the mantle of the prophecy? Somehow I think Augusta Longbottom would take a rather dim view of that and Dumbledore, or whoever, would find their hands full.
Author's responseQuite honstly, I hadn't expected this to be so well received. As such, I only began to consider doing a short second page, after I recieved so many nice reviews. Since, at this point in time, the wizarding world at large thinks voldmort is dead, and the only one who more-than suspects he is not, is Dumbledore, I was thinking of focusing on the personal tragedy, rather than the larger one. My focus would likely be the Dursleys, some of the neighbors, McGonagall, Mrs.Figg, and Dumbledore, as no one else knows Harry. Alorkin
- Good story. Very sad and moving.
Would've loved to have seen the Durselys being confronted and busted though.
Author's responseSeveral people have shown similiar interest, so I am working on a short companion piece, where the guilty parties have to face the consequences for their actions. Alorkin
- It will be interesting to see the effects of Harry's demise on those responsible, the Dursleys and Dumbledore as well as the reactions of those others who are close to the situation. I hate to imagine the reaction of Sirius in prison when he finds out and I doubt Remus Lupin will be too thrilled, either. Oh the other hand, I wonder if this also deliteriously affects Voldemort's spirt?
What would be equally interesting is to see the way this perturbs the timeline in the long-term; without Harry, what are the odds on Hermione dying in that girls' restroom on Halloween? Or any of the other saving efforts Harry has been responsible for. The long-term impact could be quite considerable, esp. since there's now no real check if/when Voldemort returns.
Author's responseThe Dursleys and Dumbles will learn the consequences of their actions, but I hadn't considered Sirius or Remus. sigh As for Voldy hmmmm. That actually makes sense. Especially in light of HAP. Fortunately, he's easy to deal with.
Now, for the timeline, one theory is that larger occurrances in nature, are immovable. Since Harry is now dead, there will have to be another with the power. Likely, Neville will get the job, however, nothing in the original prophesey said that 'the one with the power' had to be born in Britain.
On the other hand, Since Neville was placed into Gryffindor for a reason, I'd think that Hermione would be as well protected from trolls as she would be with Harry. All on hs to do is twist the figures a bit. (I believe large corporations call that 'creative accounting'.) Alorkin
- very sad and emotionally moving story. you're a great writer, and I'm sorry that you had to undergo such a childhood. I hope someday the world may rest in peace knowing that no innocent will have to go through such ordeals.
Author's responseThank you for your kind words. I agree completely. Our children are our world. They should be treated with love and respect, not with pain and neglect. Alorkin
- omg . . . that was so sad and moving . . it was all to real. im so sorry to read about what happened to you virtual hug thanks for sharing with all of us.
Author's responseHeya,Slash. I wrote this because almost verybody writes stories like this and somehow, little Harry both survives, and forgives his tormentors. It usually doesn't work that way. My inspiration for this story, is 'Paddy's Little Pup', by teacherbev. It's well worth the read.
As for my history, when my daughter was born, I swore she would never fear me the way I feared my dad. Her mother died 19 months later, and I'm certain, that that oath kept us both (relatively) sane. She's twelve now. Alorkin
BTW, thanks for the huggs.
(#) FenrisWolf 2007-03-04The only thing wrong with this is that we don't get to see Dumbledore pay any kind of price for his neglect.
This would also, with one change, make an interesting start for an Independent Harry fic. If, instead of reporting a dead child, the burglar rescued an abused child and raised him as his own, what might happen when Harry got to Hogwarts? Especially if the burglar was like Fagin and had begun training Harry in his craft?
Author's responseFenriswolf! WOO HOOO! Ths s sooooo COOL! Now I've got four of my favorte writers...and they all like my work! Dances Snoopy dance!
I am developing a second page, where Dumblefutz does indeed get his. The Dursleys also get their comeuppance as do some of the neighbors.
Thee burglar takes Harry and turns hm into Olver Twist is a good idea for 'Independant Harry', but I was going more for heavy emotional impact. There are far too many stories where Harry is abused nearly to death, somehow miraculously survives, and forgives the world, before saving everyone. It works, but more frequently, such abuse ends up killing the child. (former cop, here!)
To answer your question, that would result in a Harry in Slytherin, and wreaking havoc throughout the school. (Sounds like fun!) Even more fun, if he teams up with the terrble twins and/or Hermione! I can picture Snape's face as he realzes Harry is in his house! Alorkin
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