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A Shockng Discovery
(#) oximoron 2007-01-17
Your a good pen Alorkin, hope to see more of your work around here :DAuthor's response
Oximoron,
Thanks so much! You were my first review for this story. You will see more, but I have to post them slowly, so that paople don't get overwhelmed. AlorknA Shockng Discovery
(#) oximoron 2007-01-17
I am pretty sure your missing an "i" from the title of the fic thoughAuthor's response
I see. Just put it down to regonal dialect. (Which region, I haven't got a clue.) AlorkinA Shockng Discovery
(#) jabarber69 2007-01-17
Well written story but sad! But so true, I always thought the many times I have read all these stories where the Dursleys are abusing Harry, What if they had killed him. Another thing who in there right state of mind would just leave a baby in a basket with nothing but a note on a doorstep of people who he has been told dont like his parents, trusting in the greater good and then not even checking on him? Serves the wizarding world right to be consumed and destroyed by the actions of that old coot! In fact you ought to write or at least continue this story and show what happens now that Harry is dead and voldie by default has won!Author's response
That's actually where I got the idea for this story. If Harry died before he attendeed Hogwarts, then ther would be no 'Harry Potter', and when Voldemort returned, there would be nobody to oppose him, and maybe the wizarding world would have to begin to rely on their own capabilities rather tthan 'a savior'. I am sort of thinking of a short chapter dedicated to the fates of the Dursleys, and especially that of Dumblefutz. That would actually be harder to write than this one was. AlorkinA Shockng Discovery
(#) mayfair_void 2007-01-17
I understand where you are coming from. But you of all people should realise that it's best not to relive the past. Never forget it, but strive to overcome it and ensure that such a thing doesn't happen again. I would have liked for you to put this story differently on Harry overcoming his demons and representing a ray of hope for all others who have suffered as him.
At least you should try for another paragraph where Dumbledore is taken to task for his oversight by McGonagall and RemusAuthor's response
I have seen many stoories of the kind you want. Unfortunately, it frequently goes the other way way. I am considering adding a page where McGonagall tell's Dumblsexactly what kind of fool he really is. AlorkinA Shockng Discovery
(#) Max 2007-01-18
Totally agree with you on the abuse there, in reality, if Harry had grown up like that, totally devoid of love and affection and starved and abused like he was, IF (and that's a big if) Harry managed to survive all that, he would be psychotic. One thing to point out is something called the "Rule of Three" - an average, HEALTHY, person under moderate conditions (temperature, humidity and such) can survive three minutes without air, three DAYS without water and three weeks without food - that's a rough average - it would be much shorter with a child like Harry in those conditions since he would have practically no body fat and little muscle given the long term starvation.Author's response
I didn't know about the 'three' thing. When I was 23, I went without eating for 19 days during a training exercize. I was in the military at the time, and although I only had water, I was required to maintain the normal workload for my job.
A child Harry's age, on the other hand, wouldn't last long. The long-term abuse, and starvation, or near starvation, when combined with the violent beating, could easily kill a child. I never understood why Dumbledore would disregard the advise of his closest advisor, and leave a magical baby with a family that he had to know despised magic. His excuse in HPSS, was so the boy didn't grow a big head. sigh AlorkinA Shockng Discovery
(#) Sch1av0na 2007-01-18
A hard but moving story. Thank you for sharing it with us. I must admit that I prefer your other stories and artworks, but this was a touching piece all on its own.Author's response
Honestly, I prefer my other stories and artworks. I just got bitten by a particularly nasty bunny. It was especially hard to write this. I have a daughter. I've been raising her since her mother died in '96. I absolutely despise any form of child abuse. Since so many people have expressed an interest, I am thinking of doing a companion piece where Dumbles both gets his commuppance from all and sundry,(especially McGonagall) and does some serious soul-searching. If I do write one, fear not, I'll have the British legal system all over the Durslys. The Brits are hell on wheels where their kids are concerned. AlorkinA Shockng Discovery
(#) Cateagle 2007-01-18
Damn, that's a powerful and affecting story. My compliments on what you've brought out there.Author's response
Thank you. It was very hard to write. AlorkinA Shockng Discovery
(#) BenRG 2007-01-18
A terrible story well written, and something that could so easily happen with Dumbledore's strange insistance that whatever happened to Harry at the Dursely's was somehow better than any alternative. Did the old man repent of it before the end? Somehow I don't think so. Harry was always the tool, no matter how kindly he was treated.
BenRG's Rating: 7/10Author's response
That was actually the point. Despite McGonagall's warning, Dumbledore never even considered Harry when he placed his weapon in storage. I am considering writing a short second chapter to this describing the reactions. AlorkinA Shockng Discovery
(#) siaru 2007-01-18
Add my kudos to this story: well-constructed and well-paced for impact.
Responding to Max's comment: Harry had, from birth, 15 months of a loving environment; he knew what it was to be loved. I think that's the difference between him and Riddle.Author's response
Thanks. I was aiming for maximum emotinal impact.
Honestly, I agree with Max. Harry should be either psychotic, or at the very least a sneaky 'user' type person. The type that can get others to do things for him in order to keep his own hands clean. (Think Draco.) The first 15 months, are usually before a child has a coherent memory. Your supposition is possible, but I don't know if that 15 months, would be enough to stabilize him. AlorkinA Shockng Discovery
(#) JBern 2007-01-18
Good stuff. Well written and constructed. The tale itself was dark, but moving.Author's response
Coming from you, with your experience, that is especially gratifying. I hope it makes people think. Alorkin
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