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Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) Zen2099 2008-02-28
Nice. This is an interesting post-Voldemort fic. I like the characterization and development. The tentative start of Harry and Daphne's relationship is nicely paced with no sense of being forced or love at first sight.
While I do want to know something of what happened to Harry and the Weaslwy's and Dunmbledore, and in the last battle, doing a series of flashbacks would probably work better than trying to do one long back story. I do like the idea of Hawks for the running gag if you can work it in, especially if they swallow increasingly implausible scenarios.
Can't wait for the next chapter.Author's response
- Thank you.
- I will be revealing the Weasley/Remus/Dumbles saga via flashbacks. The final battle on the other hand will NOT be explained. (Though I am going to have Dumbles keep asking and keep getting BS that he buys into, forcing Harry to pay Neville.)Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) Vanir 2008-03-01
You know, this is one excellent way to spend some quality time with my comp.
Daphne is intriguing, and the thing where she asked Neville for the pictures were brilliant, and it reveals that she's not quite so unwilling to explore as she sort of appears. I can just see her and Harry plot revenge against her parents for forcing her to take those pictures, perhaps with Neville's assistance.
Hey, I have a dirty mind. I get readers that way!
That kind of revenge sounds just like the thing this kind of Harry would go for.
We also need to know more about the betrayals. Ginny and Molly as deceiving bitches has been done, but you're a creative one.
For once a Vanir and an OdinMage agrees: Don't forget the others.
VanirAuthor's response
- They aren't going to be all that serious for the foreseeable future. Harry's just discovering what it means to be alive.
- Who did what to whom (and with what) will be revealed in a chapter or two...Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) lycus 2008-03-01
Another great chapter, thanks for the non-sexual scene with hermione. as for the falling out between harry and his friends you've given enough information on why the split happened. But I also realized that the turning point in your story is when hermione and ron break up. hermione will turn to harry for comfort and ron will be by himself unless he gets another girlfriend since he can't be around harry now. but also ginny may have cost harry his friends but I would really like to see her reaction to harry having new friends and also dating, I mean it sounds like she woul pitch a fit when she found out that harry was dating someone and not miserable.Author's response
- Everyone wants to begrudge Hermione her nookie...
- Ron and Hermione will have a parting of the ways in a chapter or two, and no Ginny isn't going to be thrilled about Harry's relationship with Daphne.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) alec_potter 2008-03-03
Nice chapter.
1> Dont do the back ground, it's more intriguing that way. And we have read loads of stories with back grounds, even betrayal once so not that interested in knowing it.
2> Nevilli has a good character, good to see him getting his space.
3>Is Harry going to keep seeing different girls or going to settle in on one girlfriend. I know you or someone said that they don't have to choose life parters now, but you can atleast settle on girlfriend.
4>Interesting to see the Hermione situation. I always like H/Hr but this looks promising.
Kudos, update your stories soon.Author's response
Thank you.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) rlupin1003 2008-03-03
If you are going to have Hermione be controlled by something/someone, why not make Ron an unwilling, unknowing dupe this time? It would make for a nice change of pace from the way you've portrayed him in your other stories and since you have already written Harry as accepting of his choice of family over friendship, it would play well in having them be friends later on again. Make The Broomstick or Mummy Dearest be the controller(s), with an assist from Dumb and Dumbler. I don't really have a preference which way you take that arc, it will still be a good read regardless.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) CrimsonRogue 2008-03-04
Could you perhaps show what happens to either Harry, Hermione or the twins when Ginny catches Hermione or the twins in conversation with Harry?
And we really need to know exactly what happened, but you've been told that already, several times.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) ficbob 2008-04-01
Teen angst with maturity and some fun
Good picnic, looking forward to what Harry has planned nowHarry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) Randommutt 2016-03-04
This is perhaps one of my favorite stories with this pairing. I would highly recommend Feral on FFN, very good fic.
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