Daphne and Tracey have a discussion, Dumbles tries to lay down the law and makes a threat, Ginny attempts to mark her territory and we find out about the Broomstick, Tonks has advice, and Ron is an...
- Be my guest to use the Rita says Harry's poor idea. In fact let me flesh out my idea and you can take or leave what you want. Have Harry and Hermione be having lunch knowing that Rita is hiding as a bug and eavedropping. Harry mentions that he got a notice from Gringotts that they are "going through with it".
Hermione says, "No, not all of it."
Harry nods sadly, "Every knut. Thanks to Bellatrix's work before she got married, they sued the Black family and since I am both the head of Black and Potter they got the Potter goods as well."
"But surely not all of it!"
Harry shrugs. "It's not like I wanted all the money anyways. I'm used to having nothing so starting over again is no big deal."
"Harry, you know you can always live with my parents for a bit if you need to, just 'till you get back on your feet."
"Thanks, Hermione, I might just take you up on that after school ends."
The Prophet runs the story under the headline, "Harry Pauper, The Boy Who Owed". They say Harry is absolutely penniless, utterly destitute.
Then after Molly vents herself and Ginny brags that she is glad it happened and that Harry never got to touch her. Now every boy at Hogwarts old enough to get a boner will have the chance to get what Harry will only be able to dream of.
This will also give you a chance to have Daphne come up to Harry and tell him that it doesn't matter to her. She wants to spend time with him and not have him spend money on her. this will strengthen the H/D dynamic. Or if you want to break them up have her tell him how much she likes him, cares for him, but she just doesn't know how to not have money. No matter how she feels the Slytherin in her won't let her get involved with someone who can't support her in the style she grew up with. You could even make her seem fairly sympathetic here.
Then Witch Weekly comes out with their annual Most Eligible Bachelor list and Harry is #1. They say that in spite of recent allegations made by the Daily Propher, WW contacted Gringotts directly and we were told that Mr Potter remains one of their most valued clients ( meaning richest) and that no such confiscation actions have even been suggested against either the Potter or Black houses. Harry remains one of the richest wizards in Britian and is certainly the sexiest so he is the obvious choice for their #1 Most Eligible.
And if you wanted to be vindictive against Ron and Ginny; Ginny schemes to use polyjuice to imitate either Daphne or Hermione, whichever way the story goes, and seduce Harry, get pregnant and get his money that way. Harry hears of this and gets a dose of his own and let's Ron know that he could bed either Daphne or have one last romp with Hermione since Harry is going to be out of the castle that night. Ron uses Polyjuice to look like harry and Ginny seduces him instead. Then right in the middle of things the potion wears out on both of them at the same time.
The screams would be heard all the way in Hogsmead!
Now if I could only get my creativity flowing on my own story the way it is running on yours.
Well if a fan fic is to start at any point in canon then Ron has to start as an ass, doesn't he? For someone at least reasonably good at chess, where forethought is the key to the game, he shows remarkably little of it. He is ruled by his insecurities, from his reactions to Hermione in SS, Crookshanks in PoA, and the Goblet of Fire, through his using Lavender as a training aid in HBP, to his running out in DH. Rons lashes out because of his insecurities.
And Ginny is indeed a blank slate that can be easily taken in any direction a writer wants to go.
Hermione is smart but still with all the issues of a teenager, especially in HBP. Quite realistically pertrayed overall.
(#) Meteoricshipyards 2008-03-24 04:19:09 PMExcellent! Loved the Dumbledore confrontation. Loved hating Ron's actions and Harry's response. Looking forward to Daphne's reaction. And Ginny's downfall.
Exciting. Write fast! (he says as his own next chapter is at least a day late.)
Author's response- Thanks
- "I've heard about your dates. McGonagall put out an alert on you and the Greengrass girl when you kept her out over night." She smiled. "As far as your Weasley problem goes, I would recommend you knock her upside the head, stuff her in a sack, and apparating her to the outback in Australia"
"Are you sure you're an Auror?"
That has to rank as a truly classic bit of dialog. Too bad Harry can't act on that suggestion.
Author's response- Thank you.
(#) Ina_meishou 2008-03-25 04:16:45 PMI was going to complement you on portraying Hermione and Harry realisticaly, as the nieve, socialy inept people they are, then i realized that you actualy think Ron is the Imature one.
The Idea has merit, and the Interaction between the secondary characters is good. The main focus though, Harry and Daphne, needs work.
A tip: If there is any kind of conflict over missing one date, especialy in a boarding school, where they see eachother dayly anyway, the relationship is unlikely to work, especialy in the "True love" fashion of romance you seem to be going for.
Undying trust is not built on pointless, petty conflict.
Kudos on actualy having Ron not be an idiot, even if you were trying for the oposite.
Author's response- I don't know what's more amusing, the back handed compliments, the jumping to conclusions about what you believe I'm going to do, or the utter illiteracy of your attempts at spelling...
- Pity indeed. I don't view Hermione nor Harry as particularly 'nieve' nor 'socialy inept', but that's me.
- I love tips on how relationships work, hopefully your wise advice will assist me in making my 30 year marriage turn out to last...
- I wasn't trying for an 'oposite' what ever that might be.
- Thanks for your input, I feel much better about myself now.
(#) Anaknisatanas 2008-03-27 11:19:25 AMThis is a fantastic story. I love the pairing of Harry/Daphne. I am very much looking forward to your next update. I want to see what happens in regards to the Weasley's. Ron apparently doesn't know Harry or Hermione at all.
Author's response- Thanks
(#) D14852001neko 2008-03-28 07:21:19 PMHey mate, I really like this... story, if you could call it that way, but I have only ONE small request:
Don't you DARE change the pairing Harry/Daphne to ANYTHING else. I prefer said pairing over ANY OTHER PAIRING, and sadly enough, I just know 2 fics that are that way, yours and "The Machine".
Keep up the good work, and hope to read more from you in the future!
(#) FenrisWolf 2008-03-29 11:40:19 PMPainful as it was, I'm glad the breakup has happened and we can get on with the Ron bashing. A nice touch might be have the Ravenclaw Sisterhood, in a show of 'smart girl solidarity', take up the task of showing Ron the error of his ways. That would allow Hermione to take the moral high ground while still seeing Mr.-Ruled-By-His-Penis pays for his crime. I shudder at the idea of what sort of hexes and jinxes a cabal of ultra-smart girls with research skills could dig up, and that's without the creative insights of a certain radish-wearing blonde.
Speaking of which Luna and Hermione would make a scary couple, and hey, if they stay together they could always approach Daphne about borrowing Harry as a sperm donor, she's old-fashioned enough that she might allow it....
Author's response- While I'm sure that the female mafia will enact 'justice' (I am reminded of the viginette in the movie "Amazon Women of the Moon" where all women everywhere are connected in an informational network informing them of everything every man has ever done...) How ever that is not the focus of the story... Though it might make a nice oneshot...
- As appealing as the Hermione/Luna idea is, I can't write slash to save my life. I'm not sure that I'm even going to explore Hermione's love life.