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Room of Requirement
(#) wesley 2007-12-28
I like it a~lot! This chapter was great I wondered I like the maturing theme you have I can see his emotional maturing happening and it doesn’t seem forced just a few of those, ‘ oh, I get it!’ moments. I like the bit between Cho and Marietta, and liked Harry and Angelina too. I hope there is more in the next chapters. The only recommendations I have are these…
The bit were Harry experienced Marietta’s point of few was confusing as hell maybe find a way to give stronger indication that this is now first person because I thought you had started writing a fantasy of your own instead of what was going on.
2 It might be good to show Harry maturing in other ways too. He is already using the room of requirements for his personal gain maybe show him start to keep his secrets a bit more and work in the shadows a bit show his sneakiness and hold some fighting tactics in reserve. Not uber stuff but… yeah.
And it would be cool to have a little Harry/Tonks action but I am a Honks fan so…
Too much more and I am dictating so good luck with the next chapters and I hope top see them soon.
PS I am using a similar idea to yours with the room of requirement thing but yeah thought I would let you know. I could send a link or copy when I get it finished if you like. It was your work that got the idea going. Of course I do have a tendency to abandon my fics…
w_Bonem@yahoo.com
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(#) Cateagle 2007-12-29
It'll be a great deal more than 'just a loss' against Gryffindor and will have far reaching consequences.
I can think of a couple possible consequences, on one level, a drubbing like that -could- fuel the Gryffindor/Slytherin rivalry. But, OTOH, it could greatly provoke the ire of all of Slytherin House on the party responsible for so provoking the Gryffindors. The first makes for a very tense year, which would likely be rather a rather worse year than canon, while the second could make for some very interesting changes in what happenes; changes for the better.Room of Requirement
(#) Boomnilikeit 2008-01-17
Very good I like Harry’s slow perversion, update soonRoom of Requirement
(#) jimmyjrc10 2008-01-18
I enchant the CAP and thanks for the CAP my ingles is not very good but I hope to improve it so longRoom of Requirement
(#) crabbe_can_talk 2008-01-20
Brilliant. Just brilliant. I had nearly lost hope of this story still being active. I was thrilled when I saw the new chapter.
I love your take on how Harry matures and grows up. The dynamics between him and the other characters is incredible. Not to mention the relevations of the Wizarding World and their discriminations against the Muggle World.
I especially like the Harry-Angelina interplay. It looks like Angelina is just starting to understand what she's doing to Harry. I can only hope Harry will be okay when Angelina inevitably tells Harry that she's not really interested in him.
Please update soon!Room of Requirement
(#) Trademarc 2008-02-27
Love the story it's great to see development in the story rather than just Harry screws a bunch of girlsRoom of Requirement
(#) drifter 2008-02-28
When I start reading a new to me story, I read through all that is offered before reviewing. I also read through the reviews to try to keep from repeating others thoughts and/or ideas.
OK, first off, I love this story and definitely be putting it on my "alerts" list.
Even in the cannon, Harry has a tremendous loving and caring heart, so I have always felt him able to support a harem. Also in the cannon, the people in the DA classes would follow Harry into hell (direct quote) if he went there. It will be no stretch that the ladies of the DA would not find sharing Harry that hard to do.
Finding a story where the "smut" is not the reason the story was being told is special. Thank you. "I" think your interactions between characters, be it sex, love, gaming, or fighting, good people or bad, are always part of your plot line, put there to make the rest of your story more understandable.
I enjoy your expanding the cannon girls parts. I hope you will continue with Luna and Marietta. Finding more of why Luna presents the spaced face, she would not been placed in the Ravenclaw house if she didn't have a strong and intelligent mind. "I" haven't seen the penalty clause being included in your protection of the meeting room, so I am hoping you will allowing Marietta explain the pressure she is under from home and give her more support from the DA. Getting Marietta and Cho out of the closet and having Harry, and maybe friends, helping to strengthen the connection between them, "I" think would add a lot to the story line.
You have introduced the information that there is a lot more girls in the DA than guys. I look forward to seeing who you introduce and how they will interact with the hero's and bad guys.
Will you be changing any of the cannon slithering girls feelings about black and white magic?
Guess I had better pay attention ti "Wesley's" comment on dictating.
Thanks for a good read.
May the MUSE be with you!!!
Author's response
Thanks for another great review drifter! I actually have some of the next chapter already written, but I'm waiting to finish the next chapter of Unknown Memories before I start it again.
"Even in the cannon, Harry has a tremendous loving and caring heart, so I have always felt him able to support a harem."
Exactly how I feel. Hopefully we'll be able to actually see him use that heart coming up.
"Finding a story where the "smut" is not the reason the story was being told is special. Thank you. "I" think your interactions between characters, be it sex, love, gaming, or fighting, good people or bad, are always part of your plot line, put there to make the rest of your story more understandable."
Your most welcome. While I have fun reading just plain smut on occasion, I really enjoy it when there's an attachment to the characters. I agree, the characters really are the story. Why am I spending time reading it if I don't care if they live or die, fall in love, etc...
There will be more of Luna in the story. I originally planned for her to be the third girl to go into more detail with, but think she'll end up a few later now. I haven't figured out how I want her character just yet.
Angelina and Hermione will stay the major characters for the next chapter, with some mentions of Katie and Susan Bones. Both Katie and Susan will have much larger parts coming up. I'm going to try and make several of the characters, including Lavender and Parvati, actually three dimensional instead of just cookie cutter extras.
The situation with Cho and Marietta will be a little more complicated, mostly because Cho is still screwed up from the loss of Cedric and doesn't realize exactly what she wants yet. It'll all work out in the end though and Harry, and some of the girls from the DA, will have a large part in it.
"Will you be changing any of the cannon slithering girls feelings about black and white magic?"
One to start. Harry may be becoming more mature but he still has prejudices from his first few years. It'll take time, and help, for him to realize not Everyone is split into black or white, dark or light. Though he'll still consider a large portion of Slytherin evil, he'll start to realize not All of them are. That should start in about 2-3 chapters, when he's helping Katie.Room of Requirement
(#) Grozt 2008-03-11
i think tis chapter is the best of them so far, i mean you really get to see different sides of the characters, and i liked the game.... keep up the good workRoom of Requirement
(#) big_johnson 2008-04-05
excellent story. I like your harry and how he seems like a real person. Great uidditch and I like the character introductions and developments.Room of Requirement
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-06-21
Slight problem, the entire chapter seems to have vanished. Hopefully you can fix it soon...I can't wait to read more!
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