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• JEDI POTTER

  (#) darksidhe 2010-05-27

  Ohhh I love the Rock-Paper-Scissors idea!
  
  I remember Connie Hammer in another story. She was badass and really a goodguy in that one too. I don't remember what it was, but it was anther indy-Harry, ManipuDumbles.
  
  Oops, just read your AN at the bottom. Good enough!
  
  Fantastic start. Lets rock!

  Author's response

  Can you see the twins deciding things any other way?
  
  I love using Connie. She so versatile. I've got her in several stories.
  
  It's funny, I think I've seen her in three or four stories by as many different authors, since Old Crow developed her. The story you recall was most likely either 'No Thanks', 'Letters and Lunches' or 'Tom and Harry', all my Old Crow.
  
  Thanks for the kudos. Rockin' on!
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Brian64 2010-06-29

  Hi Alorkin,
  
  One thing you should know about ff dot net is that it strips email addresses and web site addresses from just about everywhere, including private messages. So if anyone has private messaging disabled on that site (hint) it makes it almost impossible to reply to a message received. :)
  
  The answer is; I'm not aware of any situations such as those you asked about, and my thought would be to go for it.
  
  If you want to email me about it, use bjdibbins at yahoo dot com dot au. :)
  
  Cheers,
  
  Brian
  
  

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) mgenna 2011-01-12

  That has to be the most upsetting account of abuse I've read. It is so sad.

  Author's response

  Hello, mgenna.
  
  Sad yes, but easily within Vernon's canon personality. Having grown up abused, and having seen it both as a police officer and while I was with the Marine Corps, I was appalled at the cavalier way Rowling treated Harry.
  
  Thanks for your thoughts, Hope you keep reading.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) georgem 2011-02-09

  It's a neat idea but the two chapters I read had critical and fundamental flaws.
  
  The first one is the typical over the top abuse suffered by Harry. Totally unbelievable that it would not have created a different person at school than it did. No one who was abused to the extent described would have behaved as he did at school where he lived, ate and slept with people for 10 months of the year. You can't have it both ways. If you want him to be abused his entire life to the horrific degree you describe then you also must have it severely affect his personality and values. You don't and that makes things a farce.
  
  Secondly, the reaction to Dumbledore was somewhat ridiculous. Dumbledore is the source of his abuse. In this case literally sending letters to Vernon to beat Harry and obliviating members of the OP who witnessed the beatings. First of all Dumbledore's actions as portrayed here would have been considered evil by anyone so what is he doing in the afterlife in what would appear to be a version of heaven? If in this universe everyone goes to the same place then where is Voldemort and all the death eaters? How would Harry's family and friends there not be trying to attack Dumbledore when he showed up? Harry's reaction itself seemed ridiculously mild. Sure he objected at first but then pretty much gave right in without any conditions involving revenge on Dumbledore.
  
  Anyway, I just think it was ridiculous. The Jedi idea was good and the overall writing was great.
  
  Either Harry should have been killed in a one time beating with a crowbar or such that no one witnessed or he needs to be portrayed as a very Dark Harry with a vicious streak. They still could have discovered him dying. He still could have hated the wizarding world because they did send him back there. His reactions then as you portrayed them would have been consistent and believable.

  Author's response

  Hello, Georgem.
  
  I beg to differ.
  
  Harry's canon personality is a disgrace, I agree. Having grown up abused in very much that fashion, (with the exception of the rapes, as my dad felt rapists were disgusting animals and should be killed (but apparently not alcoholic child abusers...go figger!)) I was very much like Harry. Shy and introverted. I was willing to do what was necessary, but I was by no means the natural leader Harry is.
  
  As a former police officer, SEAL and having served with the Marine Corps, I have seen and studied far too much of abuse. Unless abuse is stopped, it only gets worse. There are two general ways the abused child can go. First he can act out. This is the most common. He acts out, gets in trouble, and if intervention doesn't correct the problem (and it rarely does) the cycle continues.
  
  Or second, he can hide the abuse. this is what both Harry and I did.
  
  By rights, Harry should be much like Malfoy, only sneakier. He's (likely) had to steal food to survive, and if he were the acquisitive type, other items of interest. If this were an accurate portrayal, he'd be cunning and manipulative and show the world what they want to see. He's also want the limelight, where Harry of canon, (and most fanon) does not.
  
  Vernon's actions are well within his established canon personality. Add a little alcohol(or a lot) and he is easily capable of committing the crimes I've noted. throw in the compulsions from Dumbledore and it's guaranteed.
  
  Harry's reaction to Dumbledore in the nexus was precisely according to canon. He blew up at him, and from then on, ignored him. By betraying him, Dumbledore became an 'un-person'.
  
  Even in canon, Dumbledore is a callous, ruthless, manipulative bastard. He's an expert in playing people, and since most of the wizarding population has been under his tutelage for the past eighty or so years, he also has a great deal of political influence. Why do you think Snape was never sacked for for his bullying, or gross negligence. Or Filch...a caretaker who thinks it's more important to get the students into trouble than actually do his job. For that matter, why is Filch there in the first place? The elves clean up the place. Or Binns perhaps. A ghost teaching a subject by rote with enough enthusiasm to make grass wilt, focusing almost entirely on the goblin rebellions. Like Snape, he'd have been sacked for incompetence. (On second thought, his mandatory classes seem more intended to drum the idea into the students heads that the goblins are deceitful treacherous animals who'd rise up to destroy the wizarding people in a second. (It appears to me the ministry had been involved for much longer than Harry's tenure.))
  
  Dumbledore admitted to Harry that he placed him with Petunia knowing he'd be abused. IMO, he did so specifically to condition him to deprivation and pain in order to ready him to sacrifice himself for Dumbledore's greater good. In canon, Dumbledore knew Harry was the horcrux,(Sounds like a Dr. Seuss book.) and yet he did nothing to prepare Harry to survive his coming confrontation. In canon, he insisted Harry had to die in order to destroy Voldemort, but he never investigated any other methods. He had fifteen years top look, but he made his plans and refused to consider any other options. He caused his own death because he got greedy, and even in the last year of his life, he continued to mushroom Harry, manipulate people and arrange things so Harry would go on thinking he was the epitome of all that is good and righteous.
  
  He knew about the horcruxes, but he refused to tell Harry anything about them, relying on stupid riddles and 'psychobabble 101' instead.
  
  The afterlife: It wasn't. where Harry met in canon was a crossroads. Where I had them meet was a nexus outside time. Dumbledore had been called because he was important to harry. For good or ill, he was important. I left out many people who'd influenced Harry's life including Petunia and Vernon, and I think having Voldemort there would have been counterproductive.
  
  Revenge: Harry's revenge develops throughput the story.
  
  ~Dark Harry with a vicious streak~
  
  My upcoming story 'Harry Potter: 'Dark Lord of the Sith', is such a story.
  
  I hope you'll continue to read.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) mirabilos 2011-02-22

  I think you got the year wrong, from what I
  know it should be 1996.
  

  Author's response

  Heya, Mirabilos.
  
  Nope. It's an alternate sixth year story, which begins in September of 1996 (and then loops back to June of '96) and ends in June of 1997. Currently they are in early April of '97.
  
  (Grins!)
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Gauntman 2011-02-24

  september 1 1997? a point of continuity would not harry be 17 years old at that point? I mean Harry was born july 31 1980 in cannon simple math kills the the suspension of disbelief in this case not trying to be snarky or mean spirited just pointing out the glaring error which killed the first chapter for me at least

  Author's response

  Heya Guantman.
  
  When you're right, you're right! the story begins on Sept 1, 1996 and ends on June 22, 1997.
  
  Please overlook that error (and the umpteen thousand others I've probably made) and read on.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) mirabilos 2011-02-24

  My review was for the first chapter, which
  says 1997, but should be 1996 – and which
  your answer just confirmed ;-)
  

  Author's response

  (Blushes)

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) mirabilos 2011-02-24

  Oh, and please do refrain from uppercasing
  any part of my artistic name.
  
  But unlike Gauntman I don’t think it’s
  a killer (I am rather happy you don’t think
  of my remark as bad flaming or something,
  like the “girl in puberty” fanfic authors).
  

  Author's response

  I usually capitalize automatically. Sorry 'bout that. I'll try to remember.
  
  Unless it's really insulting, I don't consider any review to be a flame. My favorite review of all time was for 'Snorkacks and Campfires' where someone wrote: "Harry and Hermione forever. Everything else sucks, so this story sucks too!"
  
  I printed it out, framed it and hung it over my computer. (Snicker!)
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) GenoMerc 2011-05-05

  So you have Harry beaten in your story. In fact it seems that Tonks and the Weasley's claim things being cruel and odd about Harry's treatment but never discussed it with him or anyone till he was on his death bed. Of course the Twins crack some jokes and Hermione..giggles at Snape being knocked out after seeing and critizing Harry.
  I really hope this is the worse your fanfic has....I tend to just quit a story if the beginning has little sense.

  Author's response

  Hello, GenoMerc.
  
  Dumbledore placed Harry with the Dursleys with the specific intention of beating the spirit out of him. Any time someone mentioned it, he'd give them the same platitude he give about Snape, or he'd describe harry as being an unruly child prone to getting into scraps with his friends. He'd also Obliviate whoever presses the issue.
  
  Harry also actively kept people from knowing his condition. Look at Canon. There is anecdotal evidence throughout canon of the neglect and abuse he lived under, including three attempts at murder by his relatives, and yet, harry refuses to discuss his life with anyone. The only time he did, was on the first train ride where Ron was whinging about having to wear hand-me down clothing and he told Rn about his rearage. After that with one or two exceptions, he was completely closed mouthed.
  
  Twins: Even in the face of disaster, the twins crack jokes. that is canon.
  
  I'd have laughed my ass off seeing Snape knocked out like that, but for Hermione, she was in shock at Harry's condition and more than a little hysterical. People in that condition do things they normally wouldn't.
  
  Snape wasn't criticizing harry. He was being his usual assholish self, while Harry lay dying of injuries he was aware had been inflicted.
  
  I started the story on a harsh note because I wanted to grab the reader's attention.
  
  It will have over four hundred thousand words by the time it's finished. If you tend to quit a story that easily you might want to look for another one.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Kage-Sama 2011-07-11

  Actually, I believe that in the first book he called Hogwarts home, so your probably right.

  Author's response

  I really wish FicWad provided us a better way to distinguish chapter from chapter in the review system. I had to go through several before I found the original of this review...and then I had to read through the chapter to find the referent...in the Authors notes!
  
  Yes, Harry considered Hogwarts his real home. Having grown up in the same kind of abuse until I was ten, I can agree fully. I never thought of my father's house as my home.
  
  Alorkin

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