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• JEDI POTTER

  (#) BioHazard82 2010-03-26

  Very interesting. Can't wait to read more.

  Author's response

  More is on the way.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) wyrdradio 2010-03-27

  Very good start. You have set up a nice looking story here.
  
  I am looking forward to seeing what's next.

  Author's response

  Thank you. More will be forthcoming, anon.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) DragonsFlame89 2010-03-28

  i agree with austrian_shadow kinda, the only part where i difer is with the time part i think me personly that it would be better for him to ether be dropped somewhere in the time frame of the Yuuzhan Vong War, or sometime in the later Legacy Era (comic books). the war and chaos would make for some good action and would do really good with the character development of harry that you have already started. but its your story and im just a reader i dont do the writing so you dont have to listen to me im just saying what i think would be cool and fun to read.

  Author's response

  Not exactly the kind of crossover I intended. I've read many very well written Late era SW crossovers, but this is only a 'sorta' cross. It'll explain itself in the next chapter.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Wolfric 2010-03-28

  I enjoyed the chapter. Thanks for writing. W.

  Author's response

  I'm glad you liked it, Wolf. More is on the way.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) stintthatgamer 2010-03-29

  you killed him!!! you fool! - liquid Snake, MSG1
  
  i like that saying but why did you kill him? is he coming back like Tupac did? or is he coming back for good? are you gonna do HP/Star wars? or is it gonna be more than those 2? good start NOW KEEP GOING OR I WILL SEND THE HOUNDS OF HELL AFTER YOU!!! MUWHAHAHA!!!

  Author's response

  ~~you killed him!!! you fool! - liquid Snake, MSG1~~
  
  Hey! Kenny gets killed off almost every episode and he always comes back!
  
  This is a cross, that touches on the first three movies only. You'll see in the next chapter.
  
  Alorkin
  
  BTW, I'll see your hounds of hell and raise you three harpies.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-04-01

  Quite the slam-bang start to your story. I do wonder just what the heck Albus is up to, but he's going to find himself with considerably more problems than he expected. I do agree with the others that Fred's spellwork was quite impressive there. It's going to be interesting to see Dumbles' reaction when he gets to the bank and finds out that Hermione's already had the authentic will executed and that his is clearly a fake with a false signature and all; his reactions and responses should be quite instructive. It's good to see that Harry -did- have so many on his side, despite Albus' interferences; I suspect Albus will end up paying dearly for those actions and in more than one way. Methinks he's going to have a devil of a time convincing Augusta Longbottom to release Neville to his training, especially after she knows how Harry fared under his "training".

  Author's response

  Heya, Cat.
  
  It's always good to start a story with something impressive...but 'A shot rang out in the darkness' was already taken.
  
  Albie's reactions, as well as those of the Goblins would be something to see...if I had intended to include them. As it is, it's going in a different direction.
  
  If I were Augusta, I'd stay as far away from Albus as I possibly could, especially given Harry's fate. Never fear, Neville and the gang, will be showing up in a more supportive role.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) Muggle_Prof 2010-04-21

  Excellent start. Interesting story line that bashes most of the people that I don't like, while supporting the ones I do like. And MOST importantly, written with almost NO spelling and grammatical errors. Hope your sister gets better soon and that you have the time to continue this story.

  Author's response

  Thanks Muggle Prof.
  
  I'm not going to bash the Weasley family too much, ('cept for Percy, but he's adopted.), because I need them. Ron is a favorite target, but as you've seen in chapter 3, he's not as big a jerk as i usually write him. Besides, Luna will be keeping him busy.
  
  I especially thank you for the comment on my spelldown/grammatical accuracy. I truly despise a story which is otherwise very tell-able, but has so many misspelled words, you cannot read it.
  
  FireLemming is doing as well as can be expected, and the doctors are optimistic.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) twistyguru 2010-04-30

  I see that you and I are in TOTAL agreement about a number of things: JKRs foibles in HBP and DH (from a previous review comment you made) as well as Dumble's treatment of Harry--especially leaving him at the Dursley's, where he most likely NEVER felt 'at home'.
  Oh, I'm enjoying the beginning of this story immensely, and can't wait to see where you're going with it from here.

  Author's response

  I found that JKR's idealized version of Harry's life, was so much garbage. I grew up abused, nearly as badly as I described Harry's life, and so, I spotted the abuse in canon, right off. While the Dursleys were the active abusers, Dumbledore is truly at fault.
  
  His saying 'he cared too much' at the end of OotP, is pure bullshit. He didn't care at all. Instead, he intentionally placed a small, defenseless child, in Durzkaban, knowing what his life would be like...even fostering the abuse, in order to break any spirit Harry may develop, so he could become the perfect little sacrifice on the alter of Albie's self-declared greatness.
  
  I also believe, Harry is actually Tom Riddle, MkII. Tom was to be Dumbley's weapon against Grindelwald, but he found out too soon and vanished. According to Allied estimates, had Hitler not committed suicide at the end of April with the German general staff capitulating 8 days later, WWII would have gone on for another two years. Tom would have been just old enough to die, destroying Grindelwald, in the glorious manner Dumbledore intended.
  
  So far as I am concerned, Dumbledore is either mentally incompetent or actively evil. He's definitely morally and ethically ambiguous...at best. I occasionally write him as being 'less' evil, but I truly despise the character.
  
  I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far. There is more to come.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) 345 2010-05-12

  THIS STORY IS RETARDED! HARRY POTTER HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH STAR WARS! THEY'RE WORLDS DO NOT CONNECT WHAT SO EVER! ALSO UR RETARDED TO THINK THE LAST HP BOOK WAS AWFUL! U NEED TO BE SHOT N RUN OVER!

  Author's response

  So I guess this means you don't like it? Sniff!
  
  I have been shot, both as a cop and while I was attached to a Marine fleet recon group...and I've also been run over. Try again.
  
  Alorkin
  
  Ps. If you want to insult someone's writing, learn to spell.

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) rtc5873 2010-05-15

  Alorkin,
  re #345, a perfect example of opening your mouth and letting everyone know for sure that you are an idiot.
  
  I think this story is inspired and well written.
  
  As a veteran myself I salute you for yor service as a marine and a police officer.
  
  I pray your sister gets better soon
  
  Thank you
  John

  Author's response

  John,
  
  I usually get a one like that, every once in a while. It appears that #345 its the RL version of Ron at his worst.
  
  You'll notice he misspelled 'Their', 'Whatsoever', 'Your', 'You' and 'And'.
  
  It's hard to get upset over a flame by an illiterate.
  
  I gratefully accept your salute and return it in kind. You might want to throw in Sailor, Firefighter and Paramedic too. Welcome Home, friend.
  
  FireLemming has returned home. She still needs a couple weeks of care, but she's made remarkable progress over the past four weeks. Her condition has been upgraded from 'nearly dead' to 'alive and kicking'.
  
  Dave.

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