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Chapter 35
35 reviewsHarry talks to Mack, meets with Dumbledore, monologues a bit (sorry folks!) condemns the old man, Fawkes breaks the bond, Harry has last minute meetings meets with Rita and finally faces Voldemort...
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JEDI POTTER
(#) KenF 2011-05-02
I guess letting the enemy capture you is pretty much a standard Jedi trick?
It took me a while to figure out what you were going to do with Ron, but now that it's out there, the foreshadowing is obvious.
Good stuff!Author's response
Hello, KenF.
Well, it seems to have worked for Obi-Wan and Luke, so why not Harry?
I hated to kill him off, and i rewrote the scene several times making him look better each time, but it was actually written many months ago.
As you said, there were several clues.
Thanks for the review.
ALorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Disruptor 2011-05-02
Tough spot for Judith, but at least she understood. And she insulted John Milton whose poem IIRC was about butlers and other servants.
Nice pranking by Hermione with the portkey drop and the comment about his glasses.
I wonder now that Albus has lost his magic, that the Dumbledore family ring will shift to Aberforth and that Aberforth is married and has children, but hidden off out of country to keep them safe from dear ole Albie.
And now the Goblins have proven how big a threat they are to Albie's plans.
tit bit? I always thought it was tidbit.
And Albie proves once again that he's like a televangilist and other loons. Do as I say and not as I do. 700 Club, Oral Roberts, Jack Chick.
I have to respect Harry for staring him in the face and bringing him down.
Greater Good? Call of tyrants everywhere.
I wonder how much more hits the blood box wil deal to Dubles reputation. He's not quite to Koshi the Deathless levels yet(A person so vile that man-eating Baba Yaga of all people helped get rid of him with none of her usual antics)
Luna dealt another blow. I have the feeling that Aberforth will deal the final ones.
Cruel and unusual punishment there.
Nice prank on the twins.
A better wolfsbane? Nice.
And Rita gets more punishment and a trip to a spider infested house.
Poor Luna.
Boy, Voldie is really taking the hits.
And Minaurd is from Greater Hagleton and going to sho up with a sniper team.
I have the feeling that Harry will do something about the gravestone of the Potters and the compulsion charm should disperse on its own.
And Ron proves to be more Rosh Penin than Anakin Skywalker.
And Voldy gets the point and a bunch of Caeg Solais knockoffs have now appeared and ripped aprt the Death Eaters.
Ron's death was quick and pointless and caused needless pain to those who were left.
Neville, when he thinks about it, will come to the conclsuion that Harry was right in not telling him about his parents.
Looks like the werewolves realized that Fenrir is just as nuts as Voldy and gave up. Hopefully now, they can get a cure for both the lycanthropy and Snape's poison.
Now for the epilouge and the tying up of loose ends.Author's response
Heya Disruptor!
Yeah, It is. Someone once told me the hardest job in the Marine Corps was being a Marine's wife. I remember watching 'Heartbreak Ridge', Where Tom Highway's ex wife said: "I don't think I slept a wink in '68! I'd eat dinner in front of the TV, hoping to catch a glimpse of you and praying I wouldn't!...I swear, the not knowing was the hardest part!"
Milton: I used that as an example because an old man I knew growing up always made himself out as a veteran, and I found out later, he worked for the post office. I asked him about it, and he used that quote as a justification.
I have two purple hearts, and I honestly wish I hadn't received either of them. He never faced the risk of getting one, and yet he claimed the status of Veteran.
Prank: It wasn't. The portkey drop was done intentionally as a set-up for Harry's 'superglue-the-foot-to-the-floor' trick, and the comment was there, just to keep him off balance.
As Albie's magic wanes, his position as head of the Dumbledore family will pass t Aberforth. Once he is a squib, he'll be confined to his estate, and being as his brother is magical...well, I don't think he'll have any difficulty dealing with his brother.
Goblins: Harry had earned their respect. Remember, he killed a goblin warrior in single combat with blades. Dumbledore has made laws brutally restricting the goblins as well as most of the rest of the world.
They don't like him.
Tit bit/tid bit: To-may-to...To-mah-to. "England and America are two countries forever divided by a common language."
that's one of the fun things about the Harry Potter series, in that we have to learn to use words we aren't familiar with.
Televangelists. Don't even get me started on those assholes! For those Christians who read this...Whenever one of those frauds asks the audience: "What would Jesus do?" I'm reminded of the day he went into the temple with a bullwhip in hand! (John, 2: 14-16)
~I have to respect Harry for staring him in the face and bringing him down.~
Harry is not the kind of person to let someone else take the hard jobs. Like he said in February: "If I’m going to condemn him to that life, then at least I should have the stones to do it myself.”
~Greater Good? Call of tyrants everywhere.~
Pree-cisely!
Blood: His reputat5ion will be in shreds. With all the evidence they've collected, he's gonna WANT to stay behind the wards!
Kasji the Deathless: Actually I wasn't aware of the Baba Yaga angle, although I believe I mentioned Kasji at least once here. (He's also where JKR stole the idea of horcruxes.)
Luna's blow is the last one, actually. From here on in, Albus Dumbledore is a non-entity. He'll stay behind his wards, and should he peek put, he'll find his dreams smashed to flinders. Can you imagine how miserable he'd be knowing he was considered to be not only a criminal, but an inept criminal? He has no magic to back him up, and so until the system he designed, changes, he's yesterday's news.
Luna: He's used Fawkes to bolster his image for so long that now, with Fawkes shifting the bond, he literally has /nothing/.
Read Steinbeck's 'Flight'. A thought provoking story and incidentally, where I got the idea.
~Cruel and unusual punishment there.~
Is it really? Given what he's done, both in canon and here, I'd say it was entirely apropos.
Twins: They needed a swat across their heads.
Wolfsbane: I can't take credit for that. I stole the idea.
Rita: Big rewards, big risk. this story would net her enough to retire on...or live in grand style for years!
Luna: I see you understand.
~Boy, Voldie is really taking the hits.~
As many 'hits' as possible...dude! Unfortunately, addiction is an ugly business. The only good thing here is it's someone who should have been put out of people's misery long before!
Naah, he won't need a team for that. He'll be waiting on the hill, 'just in case'.
Potter grave: It's not necessary. According to the theory I'm using, (Thank Radaslab for the idea) As Albus' magic wanes, his charms will fail by themselves. The same goes for the spell he's used to imprison the Longbottoms. It'll take some time, but they will meet their son again.
The memory charms on Arabella will be slightly different as the damage is more subtle in nature. It'll still take time but she will eventually recover her memory.
Rosh Penin: Basically, yes. He shared a lot of traits with Anakin as well. If he had stayed where he was, he would have survived, but he wanted the spotlight.
He got it.
Caeg Solais knockoffs: I couldn't find Caeg Solais anywhere in Wookieepedia, but 'Sokay. For a bunch of half-trained kids, they did pretty good.
~Ron's death was quick and pointless and caused needless pain to those who were left.~
I agree. The death of a loved one is never easy, and unfortunately Ron was too focused on the glory to remember anything else. As I said, 'his mistake cost them all, dearly'.
Neville: He'll likely knock him on his ass first, but...yeah.
I'd say that Remus' removing the head of the strongest were in two seconds flat, probably had a great deal to do with that.
Cure:
Poison: Thus far, only Remus was affected by that particular poison. On a related note, Harry still has access to the nanite technology. If it can remove the gent that makes one magical, perhaps it can be used to correct the illness? As for Remus, your suggestion was a very good one. In that case, all they'd have to do is isolate the silver in the blood and remove it.
Epilogue will be up as soon as I can, but remember R L is being a bitch.
Thanks for the nice review.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Rob 2011-05-02
Good scenes for both Albus and Voldie and his deez. Never have been a Ron fan, but sad to see him go like this, fairly pointless.
Author's response
Heya Rob.
Thanks for the kudos.
Ron: Yep. Worse...it could have been prevented if he had only obeyed orders.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) SkeeterB 2011-05-02
I know of a phrase that would fit that situation especially well. It comes from the game World of Warcraft.It's a Orcish phrase that means Victory or Death.
LOK'TAR OGAR!!!
I think that would have REALLY fit the scene if you had known about it.Author's response
Heya Skeeter.
If I'd have known that I might have used it.
On the other hand, while the goblins might be death or glory types, Amelia isn't.
Larath Turok!
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Teresa 2011-05-02
Whew.......... all I can say is this, I loved this chapter! Many thanks for another excellent and exciting section! I loved the downfall of the two "Dork Lords" ! :)
Author's response
Thanks, Teresa!
This was probably the second hardest chapter I've written in this story, and that because I had to kill off a major character, and do it in a believable way. The battle scene was written months ago but every time I read through, I kept telling myself "No, that won't do."
The downfall of the two Dork Lords!
I love it!
Until next time...
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Wolfric 2011-05-02
Great chapter. I thought the battle was well executed, as were the DEs. Dumbledore's downfall was satisfying. Ron discovered the glory of the grave is what awaits most who seek glory. Thanks for writing. W.Author's response
Heya Wolfric!
There's not that much difference between sword-fightng and gunfights. And God knows I've been in enough of /those/. The Deez thought they were invincible and discovered differently.
Dumbledore's downfall: I thought so. "After all, Tom, there are things much worse than death!" (OotP)
"The glory of the dead."
Absolutely perfect!
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) DrT 2011-05-02
Well, Ron, you were given every chance, but oft-times fate wins out over warnings. . . .Author's response
Heya Doc!
Yeah, I have to agree. Harry did everything in his power, but like Luna said: "His fate is already written."
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) mwinter 2011-05-02
Glad you didn't make Ron the next Dark Lord. Great chapter. So who's going to come to the Jedi Academy to finish all the students Magical training? I do see that once they are done that training that they them selves will teach the young magical Jedi both magic and the force while others will just get trained in the force. Awaiting the next chapter.Author's response
Heya mwinter.
Can you imagine how dangerous he'd be? Worse, if he did become a Dark lord, who do you think would have to go and take him down? (Actually, I made that point specifically in another story.)
The academy. Harry is going to pull double duty for a while, attending Hoggy's, teaching Jedi(though on a much more relaxed schedule) and taking care of his new family.
I haven't decided on the staff yet, but all the students still attending Hoggy's will be returning to complete their schooling. Then, if they wish, they will finish their Jedi Training. Remember, they have the Ministry, Wizengamot and the school board on their side.
Helen, Kyle and Sarah will be the first students and more will be selected as time goes by. Also, it will be an individual training. Mack is not the only non-magical force sensitive on earth. those who need training in magic will have it, those who want to learn Algebra can go see Hermione.
The next chapter will be the wrap up.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) dennisud 2011-05-02
First I know here Luna will end up, and though she sill visit the Weasley's she will be under House potter protection!
And this can't be the end as the Jedi Academy has to continue and Harry and friends have to upgrade the existing British Wizarding society to the new century and a new clarity!
I think that the Jedi and Magical will combine to be what the Jedi are! Protectors of the realm and the fists of justice and compassion!
DennisudAuthor's response
Hello, dennisud.
Basically yes. Luna is a Weasley now, but her 'family' is at the academy. I'm figuring her child will be a very powerful force user too.
This story is over but the epilogue. If I decide to write a sequel, (This story tops out at over four hundred thousand words!) it will be set years down the road.
The changes to the Wizarding world have already begun, and with Amelia's capable husbandry should see the British mages into the twenty first century. the few remaining purebloods are for the most part, in agreement.
The Jedi will be ambassadors, protectors and when necessary, bringers of justice. As Yoda intended, they will be compassionate and firm, but unlike the old order, they will embrace their emotions (under strict controls of course.)
Alorkin
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