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37 reviewsHarry escapes britain, and learns the truth about the weirdest heritage ever. He learns stuff and gets some girls, too. There will be a lot of NC-17 here, and not much quality. I write to amuse my...
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Harry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) gadriam 2007-09-10
Was that really the right summary? You need to update real soon.Author's response
The next chapter will be up really soon.It will be tied together, but it'll take me 5-6 chaps.Harry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) slasheh 2007-09-10
nice start of a story. Your writing might not be shakespeare yet, but it isn't so bad that you have to bash yourselve in an authors note ;)
Anyway, i'll say more about the plot and characters when i have something more to review, since at the moment it is still a trifle confusing (though that is perfectly fine for the start of a longer story).
Author's response
Thanks.
My outline will take me to about 35 chapters at about 3-4 K.
I hang some at DLP, where i bash others wildly. I just thought i'd be fair8-).
Thanks.
My outline will take me to about 35 chapters at about 3-4 K.
I hang some at DLP, where i bash others wildly. I just thought I'd be fair8-).Harry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) Dragen 2007-09-10
What a great start to the story, I like how Hermione, Luna and Ginny reacted when they saw Harry. It was strange that you started on 1st of September, then went back to the day they left school a few months earlier, mind you you should of said.
The stupid ministry's laws, about Veela's and them needing a owner. Now is Gabrielle Bonded or Claimed...Harry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) jabarber69 2007-09-10
Hey your story aint half bad, although you definitely have problem with captilizing the letter "I" and you seem to have this fetish in saying Sirius is dead quite a lot! But hey other than that you aint to bad a writer. I can name you numerous writers all over the net of hp stories that while they write a interesting plot there writing style reminds me of a 3rd or 4th grader, in other words really, really bad. So there dont let yourself get down you have room for improvement but... keep writing please and keep updating this story, you got me downright interested!Author's response
Thanks. My native language doesn't capitalize first person pronouns, so it's bloody hard to remember. I'll keep writing. I have some points to make with this story, as well as some situations i really want to put Harry in. Expect rapid turns, though.
VanirHarry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) hawk426 2007-09-10
It might be something you're just writing for fun, but I have to say it seems to be a pretty good start. I'll comment further on the plot once there's more than the intro, but it looks pretty good so far - nothing unreadable for grammar/spelling; only a few small mistakes that I can remember sticking out.
I look forward to reading more of this (No, not just for the smut... really! ^_^). Seriously, though, I agree with slasheh. It ain't perfect, but it definately is at the very least a decent start.Harry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) grizwald 2007-09-10
I wont say its the start of an epic story but it does look to be going in the direction of a fun and entertaining story. You said that you were writing this for your own amusement and thats great but i hope you don't stop being interested in your own story cause i would like to see the end. and your writing is not bad at least every word you used was used correctly.Harry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) Nautilus 2007-09-10
that had more of a story and some decent dialogs. whilst your no shakespear (never liked the guy, lol) this was worth the read... if you plan to keep the same structure and perhaps work on a thing or two, this will be great.
i do hope you have a plot planned out and try to stay away from some aspects of superHarry. but, everything else is fair game.
the fact, that they are not already in bed, in teh first chapter is a plus... and whilst harry is OC, its an OC that many of us want, because we don't agree with JK in the 6th and 7th book...
congrats, and the twist with the dursley will be good, as well as why Gabbie's name wasn't brought up in the opening scene by the stranger...Harry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) Nautilus 2007-09-10
that had more of a story and some decent dialogs. whilst your no shakespear (never liked the guy, lol) this was worth the read... if you plan to keep the same structure and perhaps work on a thing or two, this will be great.
i do hope you have a plot planned out and try to stay away from some aspects of superHarry. but, everything else is fair game.
the fact, that they are not already in bed, in teh first chapter is a plus... and whilst harry is OC, its an OC that many of us want, because we don't agree with JK in the 6th and 7th book...
congrats, and the twist with the dursley will be good, as well as why Gabbie's name wasn't brought up in the opening scene by the stranger...Author's response
Thanks.
Which aspects are those? I haven't really set things yet, so there's room for change.
I'm afraid the fate of the Dursley's won't be revealed for quite some time, and will disappoint you at least a little.
VanirHarry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) Genericrandom5 2007-09-10
Believe it or else, it's not even close to bad. I wouldn't call it good, but amusing, enjoyable, and potentially really, really hot look like pretty decent chances. We need moar as soon as you've got it ready so we can tell you for sure. And smut, we need that too. ~.^
Harry Potter and the Midnight Sun.
(#) Genericrandom5 2007-09-10
Believe it or else, it's not even close to bad. I wouldn't call it good, but amusing, enjoyable, and potentially really, really hot look like pretty decent chances. We need moar as soon as you've got it ready so we can tell you for sure. And smut, we need that too. ~.^
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