- Another excellent and readable chapter. The Death Squad shooting itself was priceless.
Author's responseThank you Vheritas. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. The death Squad killing itself off was based on a movie I saw. (See the review reply for Teresa) and it seemed just the kind of stupidity they would commit.
- Its been awhile since I've checked some facts here but I have a few questions!
-Will they exclusively be using Jedi Force weapons here or will it be blended with the use of Wands or wandless magic?
-Will this stay Harry/Hermione or will another witch join them?
-Finally will we see some of the main secondary characters die sooner rather then later on both sides?
Thanks and you have a helluva story here!
Author's responseQ1) I intend to have them training intensively to call upon the force, develop themselves physically, use lightsabers and protect their minds, but they will still have their wands. most of the students have become used to using them. In the final showdown it will be lightsabers...unless i make a last minute change.
Q2) For the most part, I'm keeping it to Harry/Hermione. I've left the choice open, with the potentials being Ginny, Luna and/or Susan, depending on the situation.
Q3) No. The main secondaries are all required for the story to proceed. We will however see a lot of the Deez end up bereft of a heartbeat. I've made it so that any time, Voldemort strikes out, he ends up with a bloody hand.
Thanks and I'm glad you're enjoying the show.
- its another fun chapter for your fic. its become the highlight of the day to see new stuff from you, keep it up/
you peaked my interest about another HP/SW fic.
Author's responseThanks you. I'm, happy top see you're enjoying the story.
GOOD HP/SW crossovers are hard to find. I recommend anything by Padawan Lynn, especially her 'Chronicles of the Chosen One' series.
(#) Destroyerdrt 2010-07-21You made me relize(spelling?) that the lightsaber is closer to the katana from Japan than any other sword.
Author's responseYeah. Lucas was enamoured of the old Japanese sword arts and so, included them into Star Wars. That's why you can find so many specifically Japanese referents in the movies. I understand that Kurosawa was a favorite of his.
- Many thanks for the latest chapter! I loved seeing how Amelia escaped from (un)lucky Lucy's plot! Will he take something to help dull the pain Voldy gives him after his clean up at Malfoy Manor? Then again, he shouldn't keep his master waiting even if it is bad news....... As for Dumbles and Snape's little plot I loved how Dobby took care of things! It won't teach either of the creeps a lesson, but it was a nice bit of well deservered payback! As for Dumbles' refusal to deal with Snape's behavior, if enough parents get ticked off over his current behavior perhaps there will be a few more transfers before the next term. If nothing else, there should be an Education Department that parents could send their complaints to, and with Amelia in office perhaps action will be taken. It would give Minerva a bit of cover if the parents and the Ministry are ordering Snape to get his act together. It was nice to see how Harry dealt with the Dementors, and the way he took care of Stan's body. I liked seeing the progress in the training, and the party was nice! Poor Voldy....... her's hoping that his headaches increase! I hope Mr. Ollivander gets away, especially since Harry's plans don't rely on his wand! As always, I'll be anticipating the next chapter! :)
Author's responseEscape: That was a lot of fun to write, and actually I had it done before I wrote the set-up. I got the idea from a western I watched some time ago, (don't remember the name) where the bad guy was standing between his two thugs and the people he want ed to intimidate. When they didn't knuckle under, he yelled to his morons: "Shoot 'em!" unfortunately they weren't too bright and he WAS standing in front of them...
Pain: There will be a couple Motrin waiting on him when he returns to his house.
Malfoy is a snob. I cannot imagine he would appear in any meeting without looking his absolute best.
Payback: Snape is a bully and the only way to deal with a bully is to bloody his nose. Harry timed the 'accident' to coincide with Snape's delivery of a highly illegal and hideously time-intensive creation, specifically designed to turn him into a living robot.
Maybe, it will teach him to respect the student's work. If not, they can always boycott his class and refuse his detention. While Dumbledore is the nominal head of the school, the real power at Hogwarts, rests with Minerva. As deputy head, she can reassign detentions, such as with her, or any of the other teachers who will not abuse their positions.
Dumbley's refusal: While the wizarding population is involved to some degree, Dumbledore has ignored any external input until it's presented at the tip of a sword. He rules Hogwarts as his personal fiefdom and as senior legislator in Britain, I'm quite certain he has written many laws to cover any of his activities.
Snape is useful to him, so he allows him his 'little pleasures'.
Nothing in canon indicates that transfers are allowed, or even available. Sigh
There is an education department, but as I said, Dumbledore ignores what he doesn't want to hear. Once he's out of the picture, however, Minerva is the next in line and with Amelia's help and the 'restructuring she's doing, the times will be a'changin'.
Dementors/Stan: I cannot see any good reason for the Dementors to remain. Thus far, they've been the ministry's assassination squad, and with Umbitch's illegal use in Book five, they aren't under that much control i the first place. I felt that releasing them form a thousand year imprisonment and sending them back to where they came from was a better idea.
Stan: I couldn't leave him to starve to death. 'Better on the thrust of a sword', sez I!
Training: Slow but sure. that's the ticket!
Party/headache: He's becoming addicted to the pain relief potion. that'll add a new twist. BWAHAHAHAHA!
Ollivander: As was mentioned before, the force warned Harry of an unexpected development. that's why he took such rapid and hurried action.
One of Sun-Tzu's rules of war, is: "Never leave an enemy anything he can use."
Thanks for your patience. Next chapter is on it's way.
- -laughs uproariously- I did rather love how Amelia survived the asassination attempt and Lucius' thought was quite amusing. I have to presume that Lucius did not have a good day upon his return; Tom really should develop better 'people skills'.
Dumbledore had a brute force approach in mind (or, considering the source, is that "brute farce"?) but there's the question of how he would have attempted to administer the potion since he has no direct contact with Harry nor, I suspect, would Harry be unable to detect such a threat via the Force. Albus' rationalizing this step was certainly ample illustration of his slipping grip on reality, let alone control. I do have to wonder, though, if Severus wasn't affected by sliding off his desk and onto the vials, both the broken one and any whole ones his sudden fall might then break. Too, I had to laugh at the surprise prepared for Albus, but I'm curious if he was propelled back out of his fireplace or shot out of Severus' fireplace; not that the immediate consequences matter.
The training seems to be going well adn at least no one is of a mind to drop out (we might even see Ron maturing through all this). I daresay that no matter what they do post-bellum, this group is going to accomplish things that'll shake up the wizarding world as they'll have learned several lasting lessons from all this training (this is, in addition to using a lightsaber) that'll apply to anything.
I enjoyed the honest way Harry dealt with the dementors and then dealt properly with Stan's body as well as hid exactly what he did do on Azkaban. I reckon there're going to be some very surprised folk (I can just imagine Tom's 'equanimity" when the disappearance of the dementors is made known to him).
That's it for a first read-through. I'll post more, later, if subsequent reads suggest further commentary.
Author's responseHeya Cat!
Glad you liked the slapstick. Nope, Tommy will not be happy.
People skills? Crucio! What are 'people skills?
Dumbley: Given all the blows his ego has taken in the past couple months, his judgment is...wavering, at best. He's becoming more unstable as time passes, and more prone to actions he never would have considered before.
As for delivering the potions, he was planning to use Fawkes to kidnap Harry, stun him and force the potions down his throat, but he doesn't know Fawkes and the Sorting hat have defected to the other side.
Severus: Actually, I was in the middle of posting when I realized I'd left that particular plothole unfilled. He never came in to 'intimate contact' with them. The potions fell on the side facing the fireplace, but he he was already 'in flight', as it were. He hit the desk a second later, slid across the desk top and into the wall on the other side.
I need him alive for a while longer.
Dumbley II: He was flung backwards across his own office and into the stone pillar by the door.
Training: While their muscles ache, they all have some nifty new toys to play with, and the Harry/Mackenzie demonstration gave them a definite target to shoot for.
After all, -every- kid likes to play sword-fighter!
Ron: Is indeed maturing a bit. That's all I can say for now, as I have some unpleasantries in store for him.
The Jedi: Will indeed be forces for change. The stagnation of the WW is unacceptable. While they will not -force- change,they will provide a clear example of the benefits of said change. Amelia will be solidly on their side, and as she's already begun to affect things, she is a poster girl for that kind of change. The purebloods will despise it, of course, but then the purebloods will be having a hard time finding cousins to marry.
Dementors: With their effect on people, their presence in the WW makes no sense. They can only be explained in two ways. the forst is that they care some form of minor demon, that the ministry can't get rid of, or they came with the island.
With Azkaban no longer needed...for the time being, they have no valid purpose. With no prisoners, to feed from, logic indicates that sooner or later they'd get hungry enough to go hunting.
Stan: Even in canon, Stan didn't deserve what happened. He was said to have been showing a dark mark, so Scumgouger chucked him into Azkaban, but never bothered the people working in the ministry who had the same tattoo?
Further, given that he was effectively dead already and his body was condemned by the keeper's lack of 'give a shit', to starve to death within a few more weeks, Harry did the only humane thing he could.
I pictured Harry as following the guidance of the force and based on the Star Wars series, I think the force would have seen Stan's 'pseudo-existence' as anathema to nature.
Tom: Is gonna have a melt-down!
Thanks for your input. Always welcome.
- Where is your A boy named Harry fic at? It seems you removed your stories from ffnet.
Author's responseI have not yet posted 'A Boy Named Harry'. I'd like to get this one done first. I also haven't posted anything on FF.n. I needed to register to review stories. I am thinking of posting there, however.
- An especiially well written training section and a bit of fun with the attempted assasination. Well done.
Author's responseI remember my own training with the blade...not to mention all the physical training I've been through over the past thirty years. Learning a new physical skill takes repetition...a great deal of it.
I'm glad you liked the botched assassination attempt. It was fun to write.
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