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Chapter 25
26 reviewsDraco makes a bad choice and ends up with a hangover, Harry has chat with Moody, Tootles delivers a message and Harry meets with the minister. Connie makes some discoveries, Voldy gets a headach...
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JEDI POTTER
(#) full_pensieve 2010-11-09
BTW, I do want to be clear --- I like the fic. :). I wouldn't even bother mentioning stuff like this to a writer who didn't clearly demonstrate a respect for the small details in his work. You do, and I respect that in turn. I'm fairly sure that it was Keith who first introduced me to your work long ago, BTW. Unfortunately I have little contact with the rest of the FFA.net crew of late, as... well... real-life is a pisser, LOL. He and Dorothy have always been good about responding to Emails in the past; you should give him a virtual tap on the shoulder.
Cheers,
MikeAuthor's response
I'm very happy you are enjoying my fic.
Quite honestly, coming from such an accomplished author as you (and the late Fenriswolf) makes the review even more appreciated. Details are what make the story, IMNSHO, so feel free to correct or suggest. I may not use it here, but there are other stories in the future...
Keith has always been one of my very few favorite authors, that he introduced you to my work makes me blush.
I didn't want to bother them directly as it would have seemed to be whining. (but whining to their friends is ok.(Smirks))
I also understand that Real Life can get hectic. As you read at the beginning of Chapter 21, my sister died in September and we're still trying to sort things out.
Until next time...
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) zamia 2010-11-09
G'day mate. Good to see Draco suffer the effects of booze and upset dorm mates. Bout time Pansy castrated the little ferret. Nice to see Voldie suffering more pain and I actually have some pity for Nagini. Like the way you handled Lav. Not every one can kill. Another good chapter. Cheers.
Z
Author's response
Heya Zamia!
She didn't' quite go that far... More a warning of what could happen, if he doesn't watch himself.
Nagini: Poor little Nagini never did anything wrong but be enslaved by a psychotic killer. She will play a part in the fall of Ol' Voldyface.
Lavender was pretty much a blank canvas, even after that pile of...typing, called HBP, and I needed to show that Harry is still Harry. He and his closest friends, have gotten used to war, and understand that in war, people die. Lavender is still an innocent. Though not much is said, about her, notebook stated she was a pureblood, (Though why the Browns have not been drawn into Dumbledore's schemes, is uncertain.)but since there is nothing in the series to support that, I presume she is in fact, a half-blood, who, like Hermione, was most likely gently raised.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-11-09
I was greatly amused by Draco's on-going problems; he really brings a lot of it on himself and he can't seem to understand that (I swear, he doesn't think a bit about the consequences of his actions - he's as bad as Ron and I'd love to see someone still at Hogwarts tell him that). Meanwhile, -those- chocolates while he's in the bath? He's going to have a very uncomfortable time and then to find the "prepared" underwear? He really shouldn't have annoyed all the "little people" he depends on, I'm certain it's going to come back to bite him, perhaps in several ways.
I suspect that the discussion with Moody is going to have some interesting repercussions as Harry wins him farther over to his side. I rather expect that this may also generate some new perspectives on Albus. 'Twill be interesting to see what results.
I loved the meeting at Amelia's residence and the follow-up ceremony at 4 Privet Drive. It had to most thoroughly annoy Vernon and Petunia while showing Marissa's parents just what esteem their prospective son-in-law is held by authorities in both worlds. I find it interesting that Amelia carefully omitted the monetary amount associated with it. I'm sure that'll help Dudley and Marissa at such time as they set up housekeeping.
The means Amelia and Connie devised for dealing with those idiots supposedly "serving" the prisoners in Azkaban was fun; methinks Percy may not be long for his present position and will get posted to somewhere more deserving of his talents (magical equivalent of second-assistant dogcatcher, perhaps?).
The training of Harrys troops seems to be proceeding well, despite the straglers (I suspect Ron will catch up, it's just a matter of time and Luna's persistence). The dealing with lavendar was brilliant and encouraging her to continue training so as to be able to protect her patients was a good idea (it shouldn't happen, but... - and 'tis far better to be prepared and not need to be than to not be and need to be).
Finally, I love the little surprise that Harry's planning for Albus; I'm sure he'll appreciate just how much time Harry's put in to make the perfect present; though I doubt he'll appreciate the non-magical aspects nor the effects of the present. 'Twill be interesting, in light of his age, to see how long he survives once his magic has been eliminated.Author's response
Heya Cat!
Drakey is one of those people who just won't learn.
In canon, yes. Draco is Ron with a lot of gold and better table manners.
Bath & chocolates. Glycoside (Exlax) takes a few hours to take effect. there will be no murking of the water here.
And as soon as he returns to his quarters, he'll get dressed. A few hours later... (Insert evil chuckle here!)
Speaking of biting...I'm thinking of introducing him to either fleas or crab lice.
Moody is pragmatic. EH 's lived through war and understands it. He also has never agreed with Dumbledore's seeming pacifism, and now that he knows of Dumbledore's closet blood-supremacy, he will more willing to help Harry eliminate the old windbag. That he's been a pseudo-confidant for fifty years certainly won't hurt.
BTW, Moody will be one of the lucky devils who gets to shoot at the Jedi apprentices.
'Thoroughly annoy' is putting it lightly.
Monetary award: Harry suggested it, knowing that Vornon would have it out of Dudley in a day or so. the last thing he wanted was a wealthy (and therefore independent) Vernon Dursley. He'll be told of it (privately) before the formal investiture.
The guys: I despise people who refuse to do their jobs because it requires a little work. I had three guys just like that in the sandbox, who would do the absolute minimum part of their jobs. In the field they were decent soldiers, but when we returned to out camp, they'd just slack. I finally had them assigned to Supply, polishing bullets...literally.
Percy: How about the 'Department of Misfiled, Misplaced or Incorrectly Filled Out Forms'?
Ron: Ep. Luna will keep on him, (and often under him) until he catches up. He'll be playing an important role in the final battle.
Lavender: Same. She has an ingrained aversion to kill, and unfortunately to be a soldier, (and that includes the Jedi) one must be prepared to take lives, to protect others. It sucks, but there it is. Still, she's willing to do something else that will advance the group, and at the same time, is willing to use her weapon to defend, which is what the Jedi truly are.
~(it shouldn't happen, but... - and 'tis far better to be prepared and not need to be than to not be and need to be).~
I agree.
Little surprise: I thought you might like that. Believe it or not, I had that part written out before I finished chapter three. I will adjust it a bit, as the characters have begun to write themselves, and I don't believe in the 'slam-on-the-brakes-and-turn-hard-left', scenario Rowling used. That's what got us Ginny-Sue.
Living: He's 150+, man. He ain't got long for this world.
Util next time...
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-11-09
Got a better idea for Percy, The Office of Redundant Redundancy; he can pontificate to his heart's content and it'll have no affect whatsoever. I've known a few engineers like that, never wanted to go see reality down "on the line" and thought they knew it all; if their peers didn't shame them out of it, management finally dumped them before they did too much damage (most of the time, I do remember one manager i witnessed (fortunately, not as a subordinate) who did considerable damage - 100% turnover in his department within one year, leading to considerable cost and schedule problems - who was 'requested' to retire); I've also seen a few reassigned to where they wouldn't hurt anything, no matter what they did.
I'm hoping that Harry's present for Uncle Albie allows him sufficient time to appreciate just how thoroughly he's been done unto before he departs, despairingly, onto his "next great adventure" - knowing that James, Lily, Sirius, and several others will be waiting for him to express their 'displeaure' with his behavior.Author's response
Heya cat!
Percu's assignment:
~The Office of Redundant Redundancy~
...and the only thing there are mirrors, so he can be happy pontificating to himself.
One of the first rules I learned on a construction site was 'Never let the architect on site!'
Bob McNamara tried that. "I'm your supervisor, so obviously I'm a better engineer!" The result of his stupidity was the M-16 rifle and the F-111 Aardvark.
Unlike the US government, you had some good management.
I'm surprise that 'I.D.10(t)' didn't find himself transferred to Adak!
Harry's gift: It will. Dumbledore will have a few years left, but being a squib, none of the few remaining purebloods will listen to him because he's a been squibbed, and none of the rest, because they'll be told the truth. Remember? Harry has control of the two major newspapers in Britain.
Next great adventure: "I'm thinking a boxing ring. (Snicker!)
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Wonderbee31 2010-11-10
Great section, and really enjoyed that time spent with Harry here, as well as seeing Draco make even more of an idiot of himself than before, but given that he seems to be mentally incompetent, I don't see how he should be breathing much longer. It just begs the question of why a female had to be cursed with him in the canon epilouge? Why? Liked Harry's way to deal with Dumbledore, and hope it comes through, just so we can see the old man become something that he'd likely have a fit about.Author's response
Heya Wonderbee!
Thank yeeew!
Draco: Jun 21.
Draco is going to do something abysmally stupid, Dumbledore will try to cover it up and both end up out on their asses by the end of April. Actually When I wrote it, I wrote it for this chapter, but decided at the last minute that it was too soon. You're gonna love it.
My question is how did Draco end up with Astoria Greengrass, one of the few Slytherins who never seemed part of his little Clique, instead of Pansy(I-chase-parked-cars)Parkinson? What happened to her?
On the other hand, I've known a lit of real assholes who've ended up with the hottest babes. (Le Sigh!)
What better way to punish him, than to make him what he's always looked down on?
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) twistyguru 2010-11-10
nice!
I especially like creating the 'make-work' jobs for the 3 purebloods, as well as the Dumbles-specific anti-magic nannites.Author's response
Hweya Twiety!
Well, since she can't fire them, she hadda put them somewhere!
Specifics, Harry didn't want an epidemic. Aberforth would also be affected...if he got too close, but I think I'm gonna have him otherwise occupied until it's over. I may even invite him to the castle. (Hmmm!)
Pondering AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Disruptor 2010-11-11
How much more will it take before people realize that Draco is too stupid to live? Ah well. He's doing it to himself. Why do I have the feeling that he'll try to make his own lightsaber and it blows up in his face?
Harry is right about Crouch Jr. He was a decent teacher. At least Moody has finally seen Dumbles as he really is. Moody is a bit too paranoid at times. He really needs to get one of those magic goblets from myths(one shatters if poison is within it and then reforms after it is cleaned and another has gems that turn from sapphires into rubies embedded on the outside if poison is within the cup.) Still it is quite amusuing with the jokes Harry has played on him.
I can see Dudley tell the bank to restrict his vault to only deposits until he turns 18, so he has the money to flee #4 Privet Drive when he comes of age.
Percy. Might as well send him to the Centaur Liason office.
I wonder what Vernon and Petunia would have been like if those compulsions weren't there. They need professional counseling. I recall a case where a doctor used hypnossis to get a 'patient' of his too beat his girlfriend. The fact that a recording was made of the session brought him down and the guy went to see anpther head shrink to get his mind straightened out.
Lavender. Hm. It seems like she might be the one to bring the Longbottoms back. If she truly does have a gift for healing then it would make sense that she would be the best to heal all the trauma that the three victims of Dumbledore have suffered(Frank and Alice Longbottom, Sybil Trelwaney)
Harry made a mistake in the training units and I hope somebody points it out to him: a lot of Death Eaters can apparate and will probably use it to effect in the final battle.
Hope Dumbledore enjoys life as a squib or magically handicapped. Harry needs to to watch that himself about squib/muggle and the fine.
Nice addition to the story.Author's response
Heya Disruptor.
Draco: Fortunately we're safe from that particular problem. Draco holds all things muggle in contempt.
Assuming eh can use the force, he'd hardly consider it 'proper' magic, and likely disregard it entirely.
Since he's never seen the lightsaber, he cannot imagine it. His only association with magical or magically endowed weapons would be the sword of Gryffindor assuming he's ever heard of it.
(Though I admit it would be funny to watch his face as t went 'snap' 'Crackle' 'Pop' 'Boom!')
Even Voldemort has only heard stories of it.
Moody: (Apes James Earl Jones) "His fall to the dark side is complete! Damn, I'm good!"
Moody would have to think up the anti-poison goblet himself before he used it. There is a time when paranoia can save your life.(Just ask any police officer or soldier) But he does tend to carry it to extremes. (And it was /86 year old GLENLIVET!/)
Besides, how often can someone put one over on the old master?
Dudley: I don't know if the VC comes with a monetary award, but when the OoM is formally awarded, he'll be told privately.
Jeeze! I hope that shrink went to a ten by ten cell with a three hundred pound gorilla named Bubba!
Honestly, given what I read in SS, they were already well on the way to what I made them. Dumbledore's influence would have enhanced their actions, but the intent was always there. As a side note, there are only a coupe of good stories having a 'not' assholish Vernon/Petunia. the best IMNSHO, is Valandar's 'A better man'. On FF.n. though a Harry/Ginny fic it is a well told tale.
Lavender. Sorta, yeah, I'm still working in that angle. While she does have a gift for healing, she can also use the force...BUT, it won't be for a long time and it wont' be a miracle cure. If anything, she'll start the process.
That mistake has been corrected. From here on out, the students will be training in 'circle; inner' and 'circle; outer'.
Dumbledore: He won't.
Harry: He hasn't heard of the change in laws yet. When he does, he will adjust, and I truly cannot see him referring to anybody as 'Mudblood'.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) full_pensieve 2010-11-11
Hey, Alorkin. FYI, there is an annuity that goes with both the VC and GC, in the amount of 1,495 pounds per year as of 2002.
Some additional grist for your mill as the Dudley story arc moves forward:
* The youngest recipients of both the VC and GC were 15 -- a WW One soldier from Canada for the VC, and an English boy who pulled people from a housefire and was gravely injured for the GC
* In recent years, VC medals have sold at public auction for well upwards of $500,000 US.
* VC and GC medals have also become popular targets for theft, from individuals and even from museum collections
* Today there are only 29 combined living VC and GC recipients, of whom 22 received the award prior to 1980.
* Despite there having been a few civilian recipients of both awards, the British defence establishment appears to view both as military awards. There are a number of examples of this in the general media.
* The Victoria Cross and George Cross Association is comprised of living award recipients, and exists under the auspices of the Royal Society of St. George and the Ministry of Defence. There is an Association Reunion that has been held roughly every 2 years since 1958. The most recent was held on Nov. 10, 2010, in fact (http://www.dailymail.co.uk/news/article-1328189/Victoria-George-Cross-heroes-honoured-remembrance-ceremony.html?ito=feeds-newsxml). The last several reunions have comprised a memorial service and a formal dinner with the attending recipients and their invited guests, the royal sponsor of the Association (Prince Charles since the 2003 reunion), the Prime Minister, Secretary of State for Defence, Minister of State for the Armed Forces, other members of the royal family, and the relevant Ambassadors to the UK when non-British recipients have attended.
Cheers,
MikeAuthor's response
I thought there might be, but I wasn't sure. I've never met a winner of either VC or GC, but I have met three MoH winners. One, back in the 70's, was a WWII vet (now deceased) with a prosthetic arm and leg, One a lieutenant, (also deceased) who charged a NVA machine gun nest, near pleiku, and one of the Tuskegee airmen, (At a former Commanding Officer's retirement.)
The funny thing is: All three of them told me that they were lucky enough to survive being stupid(their words, in every case!)
Quite frankly though I'm older and (presumably) wiser, and i respect he hell out of anyone who's earned that particular medal, I don't think I'd ever like to have one.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) ngbeken 2010-11-20
oooohhh my god i absolutely love this story i love how u used but harry potter and star wars i wont have thought of that andd its a really amazing story. not to mention i love reading dark or manipulative dumbels. continue loving itAuthor's response
Thank you ngbeken.
I actually got the idea...sort of, from Padawan Lynn's Chronicles Of The Chosen One, an excellent read. Her's was the first Jedi Harry story i ever read where the action takes place here on Earth.
Evil/manipulative, Dumbles. Having grown up abused, I cannot see Dumbledore as anything but evil. No one with a conscience would do that to a child.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) royslady51 2011-07-20
“And I won’t. All I’m doing is removing his ability to use magic. He’ll still have a bit left, so he won’t die from it’s loss, he just won’t have enough to use. Magically, he’ll be a squib.”
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Goooood boy, you darlin' child.Author's response
Hello Royslady
What better revenge, sez I?
Alorkin
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