Categories > Anime/Manga > Naruto > The Pride
The Pride
In the two years since the 4th Great Shinobi War, the world has slowly slipped back into chaos. Having had his dream of becoming Hokage taken from him, he sets out to reshape the world in much the ...
?Blocked
Reviews
The Pride
(#) Akuma-Heika 2014-07-09
i believe it is very likely that Sasuke will be allowed to return mostly because Kishimoto seems to like black haired bishonen. Nothing wrong with being gay but it shouldn't color all of your decisions.
Realistically Sasuke would be guilty of too many capital crimes, war crimes, and an accomplice to even more crimes to be able to escape the death penalty even by JP Law (considering JP does not have the death penalty that is saying something). From what I know of common laws and international law Sasuke would receive the death penalty a few dozen times over, but that is reality and Kishimoto has shown that he has been out of touch with reality for awhile.
The Pride
(#) drgheart2 2014-07-10
Hi there, I've commented once as takahebi55 on deviant.I really enjoy your stories and am a big fan. I think this story has some potential, however I think you are far too critical of sasuke. I think for this story to be good and believeable you have to get over the fact that sasuke is pure evil. He isn't and I wouldn't necessarily call him selfish. You make him so much more cruel than he is and so far I like how he is in this particular story. You should continue to go with his ambition, but don't make it seem like he is the villain. I believe good antagonists are always best when you can identify and understand why they do the things they do. Good luck and keep up the good work.Author's response
Thanks for the review. I would have to disagree with you naturally on how critical I am of Sasuke. I mean so far his crimes in the manga are, Assualting a teammate and would have killed him if not for Kyuubi healing Naruto, defecting to an enemy village, attempting to kidnap a Kumogakure Shinobi while knowing full well doing so would be a death sentence, killing a kumogakure shinobi trying to locate his kidnap victim, killing numerous Samurai in his pursuit to kill the acting Hokage, maiming the Raikage who was justifiably pissed at him, killing the acting Hokage (which I give him a pass for since he was avenging his clan) but he did it by stabbing another teammate through the heart who would have died if not for Sakura's healing abilities. Sasuke is to me the very definition of what evil is, a person who has no qualms about hurting and using others so long as he reaches his own goals which by that definition makes him also extremely selfish.
Sasuke might see his goals as noble, but his actions are anything but. I mean consider for a moment how many Samurai children whose parents he killed in order to "avenge" Itachi. In truth he is an extremely cruel person since he discarded Karin simply because he had no further use for her and was well aware of her feelings for him.The Pride
(#) Real-Steel-Kouryuo 2014-07-11
Considering that this story is on two websites, I'm curious which will be continued more than the other. I remember you were posting EroNinja on three websites, this one, Fanficiton and AdultFanfic and so far only on this site does EroNinja has the most updates.
I think for the time being, I'll review the story on this site because this site tends to allow more freedom for the writers than Fanfiction does because of whatever political correctness they tend to have going for them at the moment.
For the story itself, it does have something of a feel akin to EroNinja but that's only the start. The points you made at the end of the chapter does show it can go a different route which would make it stand alone from EroNinja. The key fact in regards to the character Sasuke Uchiha (don't know if I'm allowed to swear of cuss in a review but I do agree with your opinion on him) does set the stage better, both for the village itself and the rest of the villages.
I have to say, all the stories you create, each chapter for each story is worth the wait and the time to read. I can barely wait to see how this next chapter plays out.The Pride
(#) drgheart2 2014-07-11
Thanks for reply. :) I never said Sasuke was particularly noble. I wouldn't describe him as such, nor would I agree with all his actions. Understanding him however is different. As Naruto stated he could have very easily been on the same path if not for the guidance he was receiving. Think about the trauma that sasuke has suffered, surrounded by nothing but death and blood throughout his home only to find that it was his beloved brother who carried out the act. I couldn't even begin to fathom the rage and pain he went through and only at age 7. Then discovering that it was all a lie and the so called home he grew up in was responsible for it all. It's a sick joke and a cruel one. To call him selfish I think is just wrong. He's not doing whatever the hell he wants, he has to. His soul wouldn't allow him any peace, the nightmares and thoughts plagued him day in and day out. As far as his crimes go, Naruto came after him. If Naruto had respected his decision to leave they would have never fought at Valley of the End. Kidnapping Bee, eh I mean Sasuke wasn't affiliated with Konoha, at least to his understanding. He knew it would be a death sentence but that was his decision and a sacrifice he was willing to make in order to enact out his revenge. That Kumo Nin would have killed Sasuke with no hesitation. I'm not saying it's right I'm saying not everything is black and white. All those samurai once again were in his way. I refuse to believe anyone is innocent, as Pain said Konoha has done their fair share of dirty deeds. Tsuchikage kept employing akatsuki fully aware of all the damage they have done. War after war. Nin killing Nin, samurai killing Nin. When you walk the path of a warrior it's killed or be killed. Sasuke was defending himself at that point. And same with the Raikage. Attacking Sasuke and his team to avenge his brothers capture. Same thing. Exact same thing. With Danzo, he deserved his justice against fully. I do disagree with Stabbing Karin and I thought it was quite the turning point. I won't really defend it to much other than he finally let his rage get the better of him and allowing Obito to manipulate his clans curse. Sasuke did go off the deep end for a moment there, laughing maniacally and enjoying the death he caused. However that is only thing I can't really defend. But he has finally gotten rid of all the manipulation in his life. He has become his own person now. He is doing the right thing. I'm upset we didn't get to see his conversation with Hagaromo as I'm sure that would have should some light on his current mindset. The most important being that the Sage of the Six Paths deemed Sasuke s answer worthy of his power and trust. Even when Sasuke was dying we saw in his last moments he wanted to protect his brothers dream and fulfill his expectations of him. I just think the story will be so much better if you can convey these things. But of course you are entitled to your story and I am still a big fan.Author's response
Again I have to disagree with you. Having a crappy childhood doesn't free you from the consequences of your actions. Naruto's statement that he could have turned out like Sasuke was merely to say he understood where Sasuke was coming from, but it wasn't giving permission for his actions or agreeing with them. My Point is that Sasuke doesn't care what happens to others so long as his goals are accomplished, and I'm not convinced that has changed. Furthermore, he has no choice but to do the right thing now because the alternative is to esstential become a White Zetsu like Zombie.
As to your responses to Sasuke's crimes it seems you let him have it both ways, again because he had a crappy childhood. For example saying that Naruto should have respected Sasuke's decision to leave the village is kind of a reach. Sasuke at that point was a traitor, and was joining a village that had just tried to raze Konoha to the ground. He was also trying to stop him from becoming a sacrifice to Orochimaru. Sasuke no matter how you look at it here was in the wrong, it also doesn't change the fact that he used lethal force against someone, who was fighting merely to stop him.
None of what you said about his kidnapping Killer Bee doesn't show an extremely selfish mindset. After all it sounds like you are saying is this man can die so long as I come out ahead. His not being associated with Konoha doesn't make his choice right. It doesn't change the fact that he was willing to trade a man who had nothing to do with the massacre for the power to destroy Konoha. Plus, what exactly is the sacrifice that he's willing to make in this sitution. To me it looks like Bee is the one ending up with the short end of the stick. Plus the reason that Kumo-nin would try to kill him was because he was trying to rescue a person Sasuke had essentially kidnapped. The situtuation is the very definition of being black and white. Blaming J for trying to stop Sasuke is like blaming a cop that gets killed trying to stop a murder.
The same could be said for the Samurai he killed. Sasuke invaded their territory with the intention of murdering a man currently under their protection. They had to defend Danzou as that was what honor demand. Sasuke doesn't get a pass here since he put himself in the situation. Those people he killed were doing their jobs, their guilt or innocence is irrelevant.
Now Danzou would be a grey area in my book even though I don't have a problem with what Sasuke did. Danzou was trying to prevent a civil war from breaking out in the village. The Uchiha were planning to rebel and install themselves as the leaders of Konoha. Danzou ordering Itachi to stop them is no different then any goverment moving against terroists before they can impliment a plot. Does it create a lot of grey area especially for the innocents caught up in the plot, yes, does it give those innocents free rain to rampage to their hearts content. Not so much.
Also, this is likely why it didn't matter what Sasuke said to the Sage as if he doens't give them the power to stop Kaguya the world ends and since he already stopped her once likely isn't willing to let her rampage as she wishes. It could also be that Naruto's answer was enough to convince the Sage in both their cases as he needed to empower both of them to seal Kaguya.
Which brings me to my final point, none of Sasuke's actions now are indicitive of some great change of heart. A statement is not action, nor does it show the consequences of the actions he will take in order to fulfil his goals which as you can see above in the past has resulted in the deaths of a lot of people. Just because Sasuke was easy to manipulate doesn't mean he is absolved of the deaths he is directly responsible for. He choose to do these things all for the sake of his revenge. Itachi for example likely didn't want his brother to join with Orochimaru, but he did despite being manipulated by his brother.
At the end of the day, a person can choose who they are as a person. Sasuke has choosen poorly repeatedly and has put his needs above those of his team, both Team Kakashi and Taka repeatedly. By Kakashi's standards he is the very definition of trash. He's a victim true, but he has choosen to be a victimizer as well. Nothing that has been revealed this far changes that.The Pride
(#) Seele01 2014-07-12
I really am looking forward to the next release. There is however a few questions I have that could use some clarification. It pretty much revolves around Kurama's action and his explanations. I guess the biggest issue I have is his reasoning for not impregnating Sakura. I know he later says it is beacuse the situation grew out of control and he didn't expect Sasuke the e use the situation against Naruto. However how did he even know this. Unless he was able to sense something through Shizune he had no prior warning to the actions of the daymio and sasuke. Also he lacks and reason to get Shizune pregnant in the first place. His goal was to get Naruto with Sakura or just get laid. Impregnating a women surely wasn't necessary. In fact such an action would have put Naruto's chance with Sakura in danger. Not to mention the danger it would put into naruto's push for the Hokage seat. To have such a scandal with Shizune would have put them in bad light. The fact that rumors were going around that Naruto had forced himself on her shows that this was possible. The other complaint I have is only minor and is how rushed Hinata's inclusion was. I know this will be remedied next chapter but still felt rushed. I do hope you release a few more chapters to this story before you put it on a slower release schedule. Sorry if this has a lot errors as I am writing this on mobile.Author's response
Thanks for the review. One thing I want to point out is that I still intend to keep Kurama's sex as neutral rather than the pronoun he. I know the Bijuu for the most part are considered male but being simply beings of chakra I don't think genders overly apply.
To answer your first question, keep in mind that after Naruto and Shizune were caught, Naruto became far more vulnerable to his rival. As such it wouldn't exactly be wise to have another person get impregnated by him. So while at the time it didn't know that Sasuke and the Daimyo would make a move, you could say that it had reason to suspect something would happen considering the distrust Kurama had for Sasuke.
Secondly, It wasn't like Kurama knew that another woman would make a move on Naruto, it had believed that Sakura would be the one. It didn't intend for Naruto to end up with anyone but her after all. As to Shizune, keep in mind Kurama didn't exactly plan for her to move on him as she did, therefore since it had already produced the supersperm for a lack of a better term, it wasn't as if he could instantly undo what he had done. Therefore, Shizune caught the bullet meant for Sakura.The Pride
(#) Thanathos 2014-07-13
Interesting, and with you as the writer we can definitely look forward to a good story.
I do wonder how Sasuke will react to Naruto's departure. Because the way I see it, with that he's basically lost the entire reason he wanted to be Hokage. Sasuke is selfish, I can't imagine he actually wants to spend his days locked up in his office filling out paperwork, even in wartimes he'll be the last to enter the battlefield out of fear of losing him, and considering the number of deals he had to make to get the position, the amount of power he has has been restricted because he can't alienate the Daimyo or the Clan-heands too much. Basically I personally see Sasuke's interest in that title fading fast once he hears Naruto has essentially abandoned Konoha. That's not to say Sasuke can't cause some serious damage before he loses his patience and bails Konoha again.
As for your musings on the immortality-debate, I do agree that overpopulation would be an eventual problem. While I can't speak for others, the problem I had with the system was that it was geared heavily against the women of Naruto's harem. For starters it's biologically impossible for Naruto to give birth, as such the choice between immortality and a child is not one he personally ever has to make. Also, the no-child-condition is not going against any of his instincts. As a male, Naruto's biological imperative is to mate, as often and with as many females as possible. And he can do that, it in no way goes against the rules he has to follow to keep being immortal. The female's biological imperative however is to give birth to the next generation, that is in conflict with the rules to stay immortal. Not to mention that while society might order otherwise, the male need not be present at birth, or even aware of the child's existence, which coupled with the fact that as a male there is always the chance that the child's not yours, tends to lead to the bonds between father and child usually being not as strong as with the mothers, who carry the children to term, give birth to them and still them, which creates an intimacy a male is difficult to match. I disliked the conditions for immortality because they were basically geared towards Naruto having to pay as little of the tab as possible. Say a woman decides she wants a child. Naruto will obviously be the father, and the two become parents. The mother gave birth, and is stripped of her immortality, so she grows old and dies in return for being a mother. Naruto on the other hand stays young and immortal, the only price he pays for experiencing fatherhood is that he has to live with the fact that one of his women chose to essentially sacrifice her life to have a child. That's it. The system basically seemed geared to let Naruto have all the fun he wants satisfying his instinctual urges, while punishing any woman who wants to fulfill hers.
You once responded to the suggestion of simply having the children being mortal that it wouldn't be fair to them. I know it's a bit late, but I'd still like to say: "And?" Life's not fair kid, the immortality system was not designed for immortal children, it was designed solely so that Naruto's bedmates don't die on him. Tough luck kid, you're not a bedmate so you don't get immortality. No club-priviliges if you aren't a member, that's life. There is no such thing as 'fairness' when immortality is added to the equation, the very concept of immortality is unfair as long as it's not given to everybody, which as you correctly pointed out eventually uses up all the resources. So the argument of fairness isn't really a factor in something like this.
...And again I drifted completely off-topic. I'll just end it here before I go even further off the rails. All I'll say is nice first chapter, hoping to see more soon.Author's response
Thanks for the review.
To respond to your statement, well to be honest you seem to be making two contradictory points. On one hand you are saying tough luck to the kid born of such a union as life isn't fair, while at the same time saying its unfair to the women of Naruto's harem in Eroninja.
Keep in mind that it was Kiyomi who put the system in place, and as such it is meant to heavily favor Naruto, and her. After all, she was already immortal to begin with so she made Naruto immortal as well. She did so for the other women since she knew it would make Naruto sad to watch them grow old and die. But you could also say she did it to reinforce Naruto's lack of interest in having children in this story.
But as you said life isn't fair, so in order to prevent a future problem from arising she made it with conditions. Furthermore, the women have a choice, its far more unfair and dare I say cruel to foster the consequences of that choice onto an unborn child.
As to the biology of it, well people defy what their biology tells them all the time. Some people feel no need to have children, others feel no need to ever find a mate to settle down. For some not having a child is a conscious decision since it would impede the lifestyle that they wish for. Not to mention that's not even getting into the issues of Homosexuality and such, which if having a child was so hardwired in then it would make lesbisim an impossible choice for a woman to make.
For the women of Naruto's harem they are given a choice, live for an eternity with the man they come to love, or choose to become mortal to have the next generation. It is purposely weighted so that those who have to make it choose option A as that is what Kiyomi knows Naruto wants. You could say that for Naruto the one with the heaviest cost is them becoming Mortal as he would have to live with the loss. You say Naruto doesn't pay anything really, but I think that would be a hard pill for him to take, especially as I stated kids aren't something he's truly interested in.The Pride
(#) Thanathos 2014-07-13
I know that the points contradict each other, and that's fine. My first point was that it was highly unfair to the women, this was a statement of fact, because it is. The second poing states that yes, the alternative wouldn't be fair for the kids, but here its to point out that simply speaking the immortality was designed for a single purpose of giving Naruto lovers that won't die on him. That was the qualification that had to be met to get immortality from Kiyomi. They don't meet the conditions, they don't get immortality. That's as close to fair as one can come with an unfair system like immortality in place.
You call it cruel to leave the children mortal, I call it natural. People die, that's the way of the world. Mortal children born from immortals are in no way cheated out of the lives, they have the same lifespan as any other human, and probably a bit more since they'll probably get the Uzumaki-longevity. The immortality is a unnatural state, in no way does a child have it as a birthright just because parents had it. That's like saying the child of two mathematicians has to be brilliant at math and its a cosmic injustice if he's not. The parents have something, that doesn't mean the kid has to get it.
And yes, we humans are able to suppress our biological urges, and not every woman is wired to be a mother. But you have a group of 30-40 women, amongst them mothers. Are you really going to tell me that of these women from all walks of life, from young girls to old ladies with a second lease of life, not one would want to have a child? Really?
I think the point I disliked most about your model of immortality was that it automatically alienates every woman who decides to have a child from Naruto. As you said, Naruto doesn't want a child, so while the woman decides for one, for Naruto it will always appear as if the woman in question has made a decision against him. To have a child means to in the long-term reject a life with Naruto, every child to Naruto thus becomes a permanent rejection from one of his lovers.
Not only that, but Naruto, who doesn't want children, will through the setup never be able to be a truly good father. Because as an immortal, there will always be a voice in the back of his head when he looks at the child that says 'You. She abandoned me for you, she rejected me for you, it's your fault that she will die.' Even if Naruto tries to be a dad, that thought will always be there in the room. For a woman the choice for a child is a need, and a symbol of their feelings. For Naruto it's a rejection and basically the herold of death for the mother. Not only that, but humans are fickle creatures by nature, and the mother may one day, when she's old and her former coven-sisters still young come to regret her choice for a child, because now she's mortal and humans, even ones given immortality, tend to make decisions based on current situations and short-term benefits over long-term consequences. So as a child you are born to a father who never wanted you and at least subconsciously blames you for your mother's death, and a mother who may someday come to regret your very existence because you stole her youth and robbed her of eternity. That, Lemon Sage, is what I call being unfair and cruel to the child.Author's response
The cruelty is born of the fact that its being born of the sentiment of "Tough Luck kid. I know you're going to grow old and die, but I want to experience being a mother." Also, as you point out immortality is an unnatural state which is another reason why Kiyomi made not having children a condition of maintaining it. You state that having children is a biological imperative, but the simple truth of the matter is we can and do choose to follow it. And yes I do believe that given the choice between potentially living forever and having children they would choose to live forever.
You see that Naruto might come to resent the child, but I think the opposite might also hold true should the child be born but not be immortal. You point out that their response should simply be sorry but it's not a natural state so tough luck kid. But don't you think a kid would resent the fact that he or she was born without such a gift. Plus, if being immortal is outside of nature, which I agree it is, then why would they still feel a drive to have future generations. That need to have your genetic material passed on is born of the fact that they do have mortal lives. But with the fear of death, mostly removed why would they still feel a need to have children? Furthermore, your entire last sentence is exactly why I don't think any of the women would choose to give up being immortal to have a child. One the man they are with has made his desire known that he isn't interested in having one. Two, their current situation is living a lifestyle of sexual indulgence which a child would throw a monkey wrench into. Three, as the other women continue to enjoy their happy Harem lives, the woman that chose motherhood would be changing diapers, and taking care of it as it grew.
You also describe it as stealing her youth and robbing her of eternity. But the truth is that she willingly gave them up. That is what making a choice is, do the two results necessarily have to be equal. No of course they don't which is why sometimes its easier to make a choice? Would she potentially come to regret choosing to have a child? Yes that is indeed a possibility. But that is why there should be consequences for making it. By making there be a heavy consequence it does make a person consider the results of making it. That to me is the difference between a person that lets their instincts rule them, or who is guided by intelligence.
Finally, in regards to your last sentence everything you laid out is also exactly why I think the women would choose to remain immortal rather than have a child. Having a child is an unknown proposition, it's what's behind door number two when you already know what you have behind door number one. Will some people still take what's behind the second door? Sure, but if you know it leads in death while you can enjoy eternal life with what you already have, I don't think anyone would find it a tough choice to make. Kiyomi weighted the choice so that the women would choose door number one. You might find that unfair, but as you point out in your reasons life isn't fair, and as the one granting the ability she is also the one that gets to set the price.The Pride
(#) TheLemonSage 2014-07-13
The cruelty is born of the fact that its being born of the sentiment of "Tough Luck kid. I know you're going to grow old and die, but I want to experience being a mother." Also, as you point out immortality is an unnatural state which is another reason why Kiyomi made not having children a condition of maintaining it. You state that having children is a biological imperative, but the simple truth of the matter is we can and do choose to follow it. And yes I do believe that given the choice between potentially living forever and having children they would choose to live forever.
You see that Naruto might come to resent the child, but I think the opposite might also hold true should the child be born but not be immortal. You point out that their response should simply be sorry but it's not a natural state so tough luck kid. But don't you think a kid would resent the fact that he or she was born without such a gift. Plus, if being immortal is outside of nature, which I agree it is, then why would they still feel a drive to have future generations. That need to have your genetic material passed on is born of the fact that they do have mortal lives. But with the fear of death, mostly removed why would they still feel a need to have children? Furthermore, your entire last sentence is exactly why I don't think any of the women would choose to give up being immortal to have a child. One the man they are with has made his desire known that he isn't interested in having one. Two, their current situation is living a lifestyle of sexual indulgence which a child would throw a monkey wrench into. Three, as the other women continue to enjoy their happy Harem lives, the woman that chose motherhood would be changing diapers, and taking care of it as it grew.
You also describe it as stealing her youth and robbing her of eternity. But the truth is that she willingly gave them up. That is what making a choice is, do the two results necessarily have to be equal. No of course they don't which is why sometimes its easier to make a choice? Would she potentially come to regret choosing to have a child? Yes that is indeed a possibility. But that is why there should be consequences for making it. By making there be a heavy consequence it does make a person consider the results of making it. That to me is the difference between a person that lets their instincts rule them, or who is guided by intelligence.
Finally, in regards to your last sentence everything you laid out is also exactly why I think the women would choose to remain immortal rather than have a child. Having a child is an unknown proposition, it's what's behind door number two when you already no what you have behind door number one. Will some people still take what's behind the second door? Sure, but if you know it leads in death while you can enjoy eternal life with what you already have, I don't think anyone would find it a tough choice to make. Kiyomi weighted the choice so that the women would choose door number one. You might find that unfair, but as you point out in your reasons life isn't fair, and as the one granting the ability she is also the one that gets to set the price.The Pride
(#) Seele01 2014-07-14
I would like to thank you for responding to reviews and comments. It makes it feel that you really do care about what people think of your story. Your explanation did solve the issues that I had with the chapter. I realized that I made the mistake of assuming that Kurama's control of Naruto's sperm was similar to what I believe was Kiyomi's. This of course was my mistake since these are two different stories, I should not have made that assumption. In Eroninja, although it is never fully explained, I was led to believe that Naruto's fertility was like an "on&off" switch. I believe the term "deactivated" was used at one point. This made sense since no one, to my memory, ever mention how Kushina had to keep deactivating Naruto's sperm. I figured it was turned on and off instantly. This makes sense since now that Naruto has no one inside him to alter his biology he would have to do it himself unless the switch is already off. I see now that this is not the case here and each "shot" has to be altered. This makes Kurama's actions with Sakura more believable. Where before i thought he did it on a whim, now it seems to be a precautionary action. This does bring an interesting aspect to Kurama's character in that despite being a powerful,immortal, bijuu it can make mistakes. In this case made a very risky bet and it failed. I would like to think that Kurama didn't alter Naruto's sperm until it found out that it was going to the hospital. It hoped that Sakura would go out of her way to be the one to administer the examination. It also shows that Kurama didn't have the foresight to think that on the off chance Sakura didn't administer it that another women would fall to Naruto's enhanced Pheromones. I think this sort of gives Kurama and interesting aspect that I didn't see before. Although this may just be me reading too much into it since i had a six hour drive today with nothing else to think about. I guess if there was any thing left to say is that maybe in future chapters explanations of how things work in the universe you made would be appreciated. It would stop me from making false assumptions based on previous works. Also i agree with the gender neutral thing. It was a lazy oversight on my end. I hope these discussions will persuade you to maybe put out a second chapter earlier.The Pride
(#) HeGotGame 2014-07-14
Leave it to you to make another great lemon story. In my eyes, for a story to be considered great, it not only requires a great author orchestrating it, but it also needs a great plot itself. This story has that.
One thing I find questionable, though, is Hinata's relatively early joining of Naruto's 'Pride'. Considering the fact that you intend for more women hailing from Konoha to align themselves with him, it would have made more sense if you held off on this and allowed her to come to terms with the fact that the man she idolized became a missing nin before having her join his harem. After all, she had sacrificed a lot for her clan, and having finally become clan head, I doubt she would have abandoned it so quickly, even if it was Naruto. Also, it would have been interesting to see things in the village from her point of view (from her vantage point as head of the Hyūga Clan) after Sasuke became Hokage.
I can say, however, that I loved Shizune becoming not only his first woman, but also the mother of his first child. I can only imagine how things will go from here.
Sign up to review this story.